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 Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 7:51 pm
This rap is dedicated to my pops.....who was never there for me when I needed him to be.You tell me to be a man
But you don't understand
You haven't lived this life
You haven't paid this price
Try to walk in my shoes
See how well you do
Pops, man, you be trippin'
Always screamin' and bitchin'
About how I act like a girl
b***h you make me hurl
Tryin' to make all the calls
Pretendin' like you have balls
But look at ya now pops
Easy to say it was your own damn fault
Now your crying about how its unfair
But sense when did you care
-DK
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Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 8:58 pm
Just as long as there isn't a swear word every other word. You should be fine. But, be warned! I will 'bleep out' words!
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 12:09 am
I think gaia is taken over your job then cause they do it automaticcally xp
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 3:13 pm
you can choose how much they censor. It makes me mad though cause I tried to make one of those VJ playlists for my favorite artist, Gregory Douglass and they wouldn't let me finish his name.
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 6:24 pm
xd I can see why, cause his last three letter makes 'a**'!!
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 7:31 pm
Well, it depends on what I see. I can always change my filter. xp
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Posted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 11:04 pm
Lol...anyway sorry I've been absent from the guild, my laptop has been in circuit city for the past week and a half and this is the first time I've been able to get online. I don't know when I'll get the laptop back.... anyway.....GOOD NEWS, I'll be posting not a rap, unfortunately, but what I call "Rap Lines."
Basically just alot of phrases that'll soon be put into one rap or won't be used at all.
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Posted: Thu Aug 14, 2008 7:11 am
Thanks for the update. 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 9:42 pm
There's my first rap smile
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 1:33 pm
DK The Medic This rap is dedicated to my pops.....who was never there for me when I needed him to be.You tell me to be a man
But you don't understand
You haven't lived this live
You haven't paid this price
Try to walk in my shoes
See how well you do
Pops, man, you be trippin'
Always screamin' and bitchin'
About how I act like a girl
b***h you make me earl
Tryin' to me all the calls
Pretendin' like you have balls
But look at ya now pops
Easy to say it was your own damn fault
Now your crying about how its unfair
But sense when did you care
-DK Question one: Did you mean earl, or hurl? Earl 1. a British nobleman of a rank below that of marquis and above that of viscount: called count for a time after the Norman conquest. The wife of an earl is a countess. 2. (in Anglo-Saxon England) a governor of one of the great divisions of England, including East Anglia, Mercia, Northumbria, and Wessex. Hurl is slang for the action of Puking. Also- sense should more likely than not be since. And the lines: "Easy to say it was your own damn fault/Now you're crying about how it's unfair" feels to clunky, at least when I try to say it out loud. Try to prune, for the first line I could even see 'twas making it less clunky.
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 1:48 pm
Aliae Rosae DK The Medic This rap is dedicated to my pops.....who was never there for me when I needed him to be.You tell me to be a man
But you don't understand
You haven't lived this live
You haven't paid this price
Try to walk in my shoes
See how well you do
Pops, man, you be trippin'
Always screamin' and bitchin'
About how I act like a girl
b***h you make me earl
Tryin' to me all the calls
Pretendin' like you have balls
But look at ya now pops
Easy to say it was your own damn fault
Now your crying about how its unfair
But sense when did you care
-DK Question one: Did you mean earl, or hurl? Earl 1. a British nobleman of a rank below that of marquis and above that of viscount: called count for a time after the Norman conquest. The wife of an earl is a countess. 2. (in Anglo-Saxon England) a governor of one of the great divisions of England, including East Anglia, Mercia, Northumbria, and Wessex. Hurl is slang for the action of Puking. Also- sense should more likely than not be since. And the lines: "Easy to say it was your own damn fault/Now you're crying about how it's unfair" feels to clunky, at least when I try to say it out loud. Try to prune, for the first line I could even see 'twas making it less clunky. All Good points that I would have reitterated if I didn't read this
#1 "You haven't lived this live" Live is a verb, I do believe that you need the noun, life, instead.
#2 "Tryin' to me all the calls" I don't fully understand what you mean here, do you mean make instead of me?
Other than that, very good, I like it.
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 2:11 pm
actually
I meant "life" and "make"
sweatdrop habit of not completely focusing on what I'm doing.
And ms. Rose, try havin that wit a beat and it fits in perfectly....and yes i meant hurl, everything else is how i planned it
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 8:28 pm
alright, Dk, if you like it, it is your thing however those two lines for me broke the beat I was reading with. When I was reading it those were the only lines where I had to pause and try to figure out the flow of the words, and that is where I was coming from when pointing it out.
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 9:10 pm
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Posted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 11:33 pm
Not a problem, it wasn't in anyway an attack. I do like it.
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