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Well I like to write peotry and do manga. So please don't bash me too bad. And some crit would be nice.

Art-

Yay! Athro girls! It turned from a ballrina sketch to an athro group costume picture. I wanted to put some diologue (sp?) But there wasn't enough room.

Bunny Girl- redface How did we end up with these costumes again?

Fox Girl- Cuz the pervert on shift made 'mistake'. If I ever see him again, I swear...

Cat Girl- I don't know... it's sorta cute...


A dragon halfling boy. It was GOING to be a profile pratice sketch, but my imagination got the better of me. I do like the wings and the scales, though.

Poetry-

Crows in the Snow-

Crows never looked so uncommen,
with they're glossy coat.
But they look like there the only ones,
in the land of snow.
Moving black dots, in the still, white world.

So, yeah. Theres all my crap.

I agree with scourged about the heads. They all appear a little disjointed from the bodies. It makes for a very unique effect. Not sure to say keep it or leave it. ::She smiles and shrugs:: it's definitely a unique look.

::twitches slightly at the poetry:: For the most part this is alright. But here... lets fix a few things and see if it looks a bit better....



::Chuckles and nods:: much better. Since crow is plural coat should be too. And you got your there, their, and they're all mixed around. Great concept, just remember to double check spelling, and get your commonly misplaced words right. 3nodding

There: Look, up there! It's a bird, its a plane, its Under dog?
They're: They are at a party so they're going to be late.
Their: The coco's and kiki's all went splat as the Gaian's pulled their mouses off the screen to play "Let the Bodies Hit the Floor"

Alright, last comment is that the last line feels a little forced. As it sits right now it doesn't feel necessary. I would suggest maybe expanding it into another four line stanza to give us more of the imagery instead of just telling us in a hit and run line.

That's my two cents, take 'em or leave em, but if you do leave em, would you be kind enough to let me know. I gotta do the laundry soon. blaugh

Don't worry it's not bad exactly just different. Reminds me a bit of bobble head dolls.