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 Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 11:21 pm
I know it's not the best in the world, but is it any good? (Please comment)
The Girl
She hides behind her hair,
trying to hides those tears,
everyone’s laughing at her,
for no apparent reason,
she don’t get it,
what’d she do to them,
all they do is laugh,
is it her clothes,
her hair or teeth,
because it’s got to be what’s outside,
because if they knew what’s inside,
they would know,
she’s a nice girl,
who made some wrong choices,
she has some problems,
a really dark past,
everyone hates her,
even her dad,
her life is so sad,
and they make it worse,
by laughing and being mean,
maybe if they’d stop,
she'd stop wanting to die,
and maybe she would be happy.
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 10:44 am
Wow, that's real good. But it's sad. You can read mine, it's sorta like this. If you go to poetry.com, and search for Caged Heart. That's mine. lmao
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 7:44 pm
Yeesh forgotten...I never knew you were a writer!
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 9:14 pm
Depressing, but good. People tend to judge a person by their past and their looks.
>.<
I hate that. It's what the inside that counts. Overall, I love it.
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For3v3r_Lost Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:58 am
Very nice. I like that you write about how other people may feel. Hopefully we all can relate because that's waht makes a poem a good poem.
Keep writing! heart
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