Okay, so here's the part I'm looking at in my book I'm writing. I just wrote this last night:
"Now, the feast may begin," he said, and an entire feast appeared in front of us. Mirage had also been assigned this house, and so she sat by me. However, a girl who particularly caught my attention was a girl who seemed very quiet. She sat across from me.
"Hi," I said. I do not know whether she heard me over the noise, but she looked up anyway. At that moment, I caught a glimpse of her crystal clear green eyes. No smile touched her lips, but I could see that she was not unhappy. After that glimpse, she looked down again, and I would talk to her no sooner than the next day. I took some food from the nearest platters onto my silver plate and began eating. The feast was delicious, and was over sooner than I wished it to be.
Okay, now here's the thing. I need a name for the green eyed girl. She's the daughter of Gaia (the goddess) and some other random god that really doesn't exist. She's a night goddess, patrolling over the stars. The main character is Moone. Maybe you should know the atmosphere in which she was met: It's a darkish room, the sort of dark after sunset but before it gets dark, lit by candles only. It's in a great hall, after they've been sorted into houses. Mirage is Moone's best friend. For more info, i'll have this whole story up (or what I have of it) up on my website, which I have a link to on my avi... you know what i'm talking about.
And I almost forgot. The opinion I need is whether or not there should be someone "evil" about her... like... I don't know. Just give me some opinions on what you think I should actually do with her as a character.
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