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Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 10:30 am
Yes im attempting my book again. i tweaked the story line abit. so ill write the introduction. seeing as im kinda tired of having tons of main characters, for this book i have decided on 6 only with tw o main main characters. if you would like a character based off of you then post and say what part you would like in it. (this way i have an easier time dealing with writer's block. Ali has already read up unto chapter three and suggested some tweaking so i did. heres the intro.
Night a time for Night clubs, a time for fireworks, a time for dreams. Dreams could be anything: a portal into a subconcious fairyland, your greatest wishes and desires, weird things that don't make any sense, or things of immense terror. Those dreams are my reality. I have dreams so scary even just the thought of them would freak even the minds of Stephan King or Edgar Allan Poe out. These dreams are my every night reality, and these dreams come true.Night, it very cold, I'm running, gasping for breath. It feels as if there is a sword in my chest, piercicng through my lungs, i can barely breath but i continue running. someone is behind me i try to look for them, i see a dark figure but no face. I trip on the hard cold ground. I black out. next thing i wake up but I'm blind. I can still breath but its hard too. I try to move, I cant, I try to scream for help, I can't. no way out. I hear a dark ominous prayer in a deep menacing voice. I can't understand it, its not in my language. I continue trying to free myself but i can't next thing i feel someone grab my hair, and i feel a skull shattering pressure, I fall. all i see is white. ok thats the introduction. the book is about basically 5 royal beings from a magical world named Pagea, going to the human world to try to cope with the norms. because in the future they have to manipulate the human world in order to maintain the balance b/w the two. there is Roseik-leader of the fairy katele court (=night court) Juale-leader of the fairy mezeka court(=day) Szikira-leader of the demons Elwin-leader of the vampires Neo-leader of the sorcerers and sorceresses i still need other races like the draconin leader, werewolf leader, humans, and other misc. characters. i have already written 72 pages. so if you would like to be a character ....or even remotly care... post. -----------------------------Rachel------------------------------------------------ ***********THIS IS NOT AN RP IM ACTUALLY WRITING A BOOK---------
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:17 pm
You told me about it at Tomas' party, and, although you don't have to put me in the book, I'd love to be your editor. If you haven't one already, that is. I have edited many pieces before, I am a proud grammar nazi, and I can even condense sentences to flow better but still keep their content. So, if you need help, keep me in mind!
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Argonath_dragonite Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:27 pm
First of all, this is kevin speaking. I can vouch for Lisa's editing awesome-ness. She should definitely be your first choice.
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Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 9:14 am
ok thanks alot ^_^ i kinda needed one... im up to page..100 now,,,still need to type it tho. but ya i need a editor big time.
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Posted: Mon Jul 21, 2008 5:29 pm
ok so heres ch.1 its about 12 pages in my notebook. : I wake up with a gasp. I feel my face, only a dream, I thought. I looked out my window and saw the vast road and scenic view outside my bus window. Just a few hours ago it didn’t look this normal, this human. Just a few hours ago I was in Pagea where there was magic everywhere, but again that was a few hours ago. I looked around the bus and saw my friends either sleeping or listening to their music. I decided to stare out the window again, and try to replay this week’s events over in my head. But before I get into that, first thing is that you norms reading this book should know is that there is a world living among your world. A magical world that is somehow linked to yours, if a war breaks out it your world, ours does too. If there is disease in your world ours too, honestly the only difference between our worlds is that ours is called Pagea and all the residents here are magical. But anyway back to this past week’s events. I woke up one morning; I was laying in the nice comfort of my huge bed, I got up and looked out my balcony. I sighed as I looked out at the gardens, the trees, and the lake of my court. It was during this that my door knocked. I went over to the door and answered it. The messenger was standing there. “Miss Roseika, your parents request you in the dining hall.” And then without even waiting for a reply he simply went away. I went over to my mirror and stared at my own reflection gawking at how abnormal I looked compared to the rest of the people in my court. Palepeach toned skin, black hair, and hazel eyes. At least I had pointed ears like everyone else. But most people in my court had greenish toned skin with blue hair and green eyes. I looked positively odd, for a fairy that is. I sighed and then went over to my closet to see what I should wear. I put on my typical dark purple shirt with long sleeves and dark knee length skirt, along with a lot of necklaces and hoped earrings. I grabbed some shoes and then fluttered down to the dining hall. I guess I could have walked, but why walk when you have wings right? So I finally got there and my mom and dad were just sitting there… did I do something wrong? I stopped fluttering and walked over to the table cautiously. “Mom, Dad, you wanted to talk to me about something?” I said, “Yes honey, you might want to sit down.” My mom said. “Ohno, did someone die?” “No Hun just sit down, this might be hard for you to take…” my dad said. “Look, you remember that law that requires all royal children to attend at least 3 years in the human realm?” “Yes.” I said with a quiver in my voice. (Oh yeah did I forget to mention I was a royal fairy? Heh oops. Ya I’m the princess to the Ketele court, day fairies.) “Well it starts on the fall of your 16th year. And Roseika, You are 16.”My dad said. I looked at them shocked and yet relieved. On the good side nobody was dead, on the bad side I was being forced to go to spend at least 3 years in the norm world. “In one week from now you and the other royals who are 16 and older will be going to a human boarding school in California in the United States of America.” My mouth opened wide in shock, the human world. I was going to the human world. Shoot me now. But I couldn’t really have that response with my family. So instead I quickly shut my mouth, pulled it together and asked “who else is coming?” “Well,” my father continued. “Your cousin Juale of the night fairy court, Mezca; your best friend Szkira of the demon court, Serif; The Warlock court prince Neo, The vampire court prince Elwin, and Nex the draconian court prince.” Well at least my cousin and Szikira are going. I won’t be a total outsider. “But don’t worry,” my mother said “you still will have Pagean lessons from Sela the warlock court’s tutor.” Yippee, not only do I get to have norm classes, I also still have to be magically schooled, the next 3 years are going to be so fun…Heh. “Ok so how am I getting there exactly?” Suddenly I felt a tap on my shoulder “Roseika, you ok?” I jumped “Huh? What?” “Rose you were zoning out again.” Szkira said with a laugh. “You really should have gotten more sleep before we left.” “How can I get sleep when all my dreams are nightmares?” “I don’t know, sprinkle pixie dust on your forehead?” Szkira said with a grin “Kira, you know as well as I do that pixie dust doesn’t give you dreams, it makes you hallucinate, stupid pixies.” After saying that we both laughed. I looked out my window again. “I wonder what humans will actually be like.” I said “I don’t care what they’re like; as long as I get to mess with them I’ll be happy.” “But you can only use wind…what’s that gonna do? Make small scale tornados?” “Well maybe,” Szkira said, “I have more then just my own powers to mess with them.” “Szkira, you didn’t…” I said putting my hand on my forehead. “Yep,” She pulled something out of her bag that looked like two jars. “Love powder, and pixie dust.” She said with a little grin. “What’s fun being in the norm world if you can’t mess with the norms?” “Ugh, you sound just like a pixie.” “Ya, they know how to live it up.” At that I felt someone move and sit behind me. Then when I turned around I saw Neo. He was certainly attractive, nice build, dark jet black hair that was short but had bangs that went over one eye; he had three piercing in his ear, and a tattoo of an ancient rune for strength around his arm. Too bad he was a tad bit arrogant, or else he would be totally my type. “Hello Szkira, Roseika.” He said. “Hey.” Szkira replied then knocked me to say something. “Hey.” I said in a small voice. “So Rose, I hear you’re still single.” “Yeah, so?” “Well if you’re single, and I’m single, then maybe….” At that he conjured a purple rose. “Maybe we could get together and not be single?” He said in a very suave voice. “And maybe...” I said flicking the rose away. “You’ll think of a better line then that to say. I’m not that easy Neo.” I said with a playful grin. “That’s ok; I’ll find a way sooner or later Rose. But sometime this year Rose you are going to be mine.” His lips went close to my ear. “I swear on my life and my crown, you will be mine.” Then he poofed to a seat in the back. Typical Warlock. Szkira stared at her with a gaped open mouth with a smile over the edge of her mouth. “Oh my god, you just totally turned down the warlock prince?! You realize now he’s gonna be chasing you all year?” “Yeah but, I don’t really care. He’s not my type.” Szkira just sighed and smiled. “Liar.” “Ok maybe I am lying, but I don’t know but I just don’t see it happening.” “Fine whatever girl, but I think this year just got more interesting.” She said with a smirk. I then stuck out my tongue at her. And then I decided to try to make my glamour, I mean obviously having wings isn’t normal, and neither is having pointed ears. So I focused really hard and felt my wings curl and then disappear out of sight. Next I felt my ears round off at the top. Now I looked human. I then looked at my clothes and decided I should probably put on norm clothes. I grabbed my suitcase and went to the back of the bus to change I went into the bathroom and closed the door. I changed into a black t-shirt with a blue fairy on it (ironic eh?) a pair of dark blue jeans, a black studded belt, a bunch of necklaces and a pair of black skater shoes with hearts on them. I decided I wanted to add some color to my hair so I picked one chunk and made it purple. I looked in the mirror and sighed. I then walked back to my seat and sat down. Szkira was staring at me. “You look good, ok now me.” Right before my eyes Szkira’s long auburn hair turned into blonde hair. Her markings all gone and her eyes were blue instead of the red they were earlier. She then went to the bathroom and when she emerged she was wearing jeans, and a pink shirt that said “It’s funny you think I’m interested.” And pink converse. She also shortened her hair to shoulder length. “There,” she said. “Now we both look positively normal.” And at that all the guys on the bus rushed to get ready. Everyone looked so different; it was like all the magic went out of the place. A couple of hours went by. Boy this was the longest bus ride I’ve ever taken. In fact it was the only bus I’ve ever been on. I didn’t even know what a bus was until my parents told me how I was getting to the norm world. They also told me that this bus wasn’t like the regular buses on the norm world. If this ones boring, I wonder how boring norm buses are. But finally after awhile the bus stopped. I looked out the window. I saw a mass of norm teenagers who were all normal. No wings, no markings, no scales, nothing. So plain, so ordinary, so… normal. I almost wanted to cry. I grabbed my stuff and thanked the bus driver, and walked off the bus into the unknown, the human world. My jail for the next 3 school years.
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