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 Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:33 pm
Transformed Hero Didn’t you notice?
You meant everything to me
I tried to live up to your standards,
but you barely see me anymore
You were my hero,
I tried to be like you
but then you went and did something like this,
and my vision became clear
To me,
you were everything,
I have lost it all,
I have nothing left to live for
You were the one that I could talk to,
the one that I could trust,
but you turned me away,
and left me in the dust
I walked behind you,
watching as you exceeded
trying to live up to your accomplishments,
is just not something that I could do
Have you ever wondered,
why you were the one?
because you saw me,
when everyone else walked through me
Because of you,
I can say that I truly had a friend
because of you,
I held on this long
Because of you,
I tried my best even when I could go no more
because of you,
I had something to live for
I will not rest,
I will not cry,
I will not breathe,
I will not die
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:47 pm
I like it...But yeah, it is weird for you, since I'm used to you being a little more, you know, happier.
...Mind if I ask what was the event that made you write this?
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:59 pm
yeah, basically my friend, he is a senior and is going to college next year, he is on the lax team too right? well, ummm, he got drunk and started to like pick on this sophmore, it almost got into a fight. But well, i was there and broke it up and i really hate people like that, so i kinda saw a new side to him that i never really saw before....... it really sucked....
(i was not drunk, i didn't even sip any alchohol, i do not drink)
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 6:08 pm
Ah. Well I really like the poem, and I'm sorry you had to see an unattractive side of your friend.
(I didn't think you'd be drinking.)
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 6:15 pm
thanks, maybe i will post some more of my poems on here....
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 6:38 pm
Please do. We need more people to come to this subforum.
How about you make a thread for you to post all your poems in? That way the forum won't get too overloaded or anything.
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 7:10 pm
voted awhile ago but i never commented.....
@ ED-Nice Poem...better then what i have written in a long time.
@ kitn thats a good idea.
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Posted: Sat Jun 07, 2008 7:41 pm
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 5:07 pm
1. already answered.
2. .......
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 5:26 pm
i have a new poem.... i wrote this one during History. we were talking about current events and the war, i hope you like it. " "-means that they are not my words, i heard them elsewhere What World?
Where has the love gone?
the world has turned it’s back
What have we become?
people killing, people dying,
we feel sorry and forget
War dominates, ruining people’s lives,
the thought of peace comes to everyone’s mind
What we don’t think about though,
is the price of peace
Remember
“You can bomb the world into pieces,
but you can’t bomb the world into peace”
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 5:41 pm
~Life~
Life is a colorful swirl of emotion
always changing colors as if blown by the wind
Twisting and turning,
through each day, into the night
This beautiful onslaught never stops,
even on the brink of death
Joy
Running around with your friends
playing games and having fun
not a care in the world
ignorant of what is to come
Sorrow
The rain beats down from overhead
you are drenched but you don’t care
lifting the box over the makeshift grave
you slowly say good bye to your furry little friend forever
Excitement
Jumping up and down, wiggling to and fro,
hardly able to control yourself
positioning yourself at the starting line,
ready, set, GO
Love
He sees her, she sees him,
she is an un-athletic artist, he is a jock,
he likes rock, she likes country,
it is love at first sight explaination: Joy-a bunch of little kids running around together and having fun Sorrow-someone burying their beloved pet in the rain Excitement-i pictured it as someone at a track meet, but i guess it could be someone at any kind of race or something Love-two opposite people meeting at a dance or something and falling in love
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 5:46 pm
Nice.
I like them both.
Only one little grammar screw-up that I found...in 'What World?', you put 'running', when I think you meant 'ruining'.
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Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 2:43 pm
you are right....it was ruining, thank you for finding my mistake....
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Posted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 3:13 pm
Nice poems 3nodding 3nodding they are great!!
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Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 7:11 pm
Animefreak1192 Nice poems 3nodding 3nodding they are great!! thanks! i guess it is now time again to post more of my poems....YAY!
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