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 Posted: Thu May 29, 2008 5:50 pm
All I needed was something to hold on to,
All I needed was you....
All I need now is for you to see me,
All I need now is to be set free,
All I want now is for you to stay in my arms,
All I want now is for you to stay,
out of harm's way...
{chorus}
I need you right now,
So come back me,
Oh my love, why can't you see?
I need to be set free.
Spread your wings and come with me now,
I've fallen into your eyes, dont ask how...
It's magic and I know it,
I love you and I will show it....
Someday.....
{chorus}
Someday........
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Posted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 11:45 pm
That would sound great as a song. Its repetitive but in a good way.
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Posted: Sun Jun 08, 2008 10:12 am
"I dont even have a title so suck it up and make your own"
Just tell me you love me,
After the love has gone away,
Ask me to love you too...
I hate you.
You've broken my heart,
Torn me apart,
Dont cry,
Im gone now...
You know why.
Dont bargain with the Devil to win me back,
You've left my soul cold and cracked.
~*{Chorus}*~
*You deserve this,
*You deserve to freeze,
*You deserve to sit there and beg,
*Down on your knees.
*I keep telling you no,
*I dont love you anymore,
*Now just leave, just go.
The rain may fall over and over,
Drench the world in it's icy cover,
But I keep telling you,
You're not coming back,
Under my heart, just for protection,
You tore me apart.
The fire may burn,
Within the Earth,
Beneath the souls,
Benath the molten,
Benath the rock, beneath the stones, beneath the boulder,
I wont remember you,
While I grow older.
~*{CHORUS}*~
Stop bargaining with God,
To bring me to you,
Raise me up,
Then knock me down,
Shame shame shame on you you you.
Those summer nights are gone,
Dont try to tell me your sorry,
I know you're not.
Good bye.
Good Bye.
Good Bye.
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Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 8:13 pm
Attempting Commentation and Criticism. ^.^
I like the second one (untitled) pretty well. I figure the first one would have to be a really slow song or techno.
I noticed that the lyrics in your chorus aren't the same in either song. A chorus (or refrain) is generally a part of the song, usually the main point of the song, that repeats throughout the song. Even if it doesn't repeat exactly it's very similar. That is unless by chorus you mean a spot where the music is supposed to repeat. (some songs have no words in the chorus). Otherwise I, personally, wouldn't consider those specific parts the chorus.
A good way to fix this (if it's something you with to fix. after all it is Your song) would be to pick a certain part in the song that you wish to be the chorus, and tweak the rest of the song to revolve around that point. Actually, in retrospect, you could look at the song you have now and just write a chorus for it.
Anyway, just throwin that out there. Like I said, I liked both songs, really liked the second one. Hope I helped a little. ^.^
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Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 7:03 pm
Scazarith Attempting Commentation and Criticism. ^.^ I like the second one (untitled) pretty well. I figure the first one would have to be a really slow song or techno. I noticed that the lyrics in your chorus aren't the same in either song. A chorus (or refrain) is generally a part of the song, usually the main point of the song, that repeats throughout the song. Even if it doesn't repeat exactly it's very similar. That is unless by chorus you mean a spot where the music is supposed to repeat. (some songs have no words in the chorus). Otherwise I, personally, wouldn't consider those specific parts the chorus. A good way to fix this (if it's something you with to fix. after all it is Your song) would be to pick a certain part in the song that you wish to be the chorus, and tweak the rest of the song to revolve around that point. Actually, in retrospect, you could look at the song you have now and just write a chorus for it. Anyway, just throwin that out there. Like I said, I liked both songs, really liked the second one. Hope I helped a little. ^.^ >>I noticed the lyrics in your chorus weren't the same in either song. In the first, they arent the same. In the second they are. I just wrote out the word chorus thinking people would interpret it as what it was written as before.
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Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 10:25 am
Ah I see ^.^ Makes sense then. I still like the fade out in the second song.
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Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:41 pm
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Posted: Thu Nov 27, 2008 9:19 pm
Those are really really good!
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