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 Posted: Wed May 21, 2008 9:40 pm
We are the just and righteous ones.
We are the ones they call "threat".
They bleed us dry before
We can bleed them.
They hunt us, kill us and yet,
So few are we in numbers to their many,
We are still their creeping death.
They hunt us, kill us,
More vigorously for they see themselves,
In us.
In bloodlust.
But, we will prevail and persevere through,
All obstacles.
For, we can turn them to our kind
Faster than they can convince each other
That we even exist.
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Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 9:05 pm
Wow, I like the poem. Very creep, yet cool.
I like the way you separated the stanzas, I think that it's better that way.
Good job, was there a story behind this or something?
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petitefromage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat May 31, 2008 6:11 am
no, no story- my poems flow and then I see what I've written- they're not a consious (sp?) thought.
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Posted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 11:47 am
Cool, very nice and dark. Well done ^^
~~Moved to the poetry forum.
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 8:14 pm
very
cool.
though,
there
does
seem
to
be
something
missing.
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Posted: Sat Nov 15, 2008 2:45 pm
Cool! I am a writer and not a poet but I like it.
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