|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Wed May 14, 2008 2:50 pm
I'm sinking deeper every day,
Letting myself drown in my remorse,
Every day I feel the depression
Pressing down on me harder.
She can heal it a little bit,
But only a little.
I'm still sinking;
Deeper, deeper, all the time.
Each day the knife inside cuts a little deeper;
How long until it reaches my heart?
How long until this whole thing ends?
I ask myself all the time.
I want to end it already,
Just to stop the pain,
But I can't...
How could I do that to everyone?
I have to stand it,
Even though I hurt myself every day,
Letting the knife drive deeper,
Letting myself sink.
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 5:37 pm
I love how you writing in free style. Finally somelse other than does. Mine almost never ryme. I like the poem, too. Definatly deep.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 2:00 pm
i thought it had a very good balance, and good wording. it was a little short, but not really. its length isnt a problem. i think i may not have understood it too much, but it was still good.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Reply
