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 Posted: Wed May 07, 2008 4:49 pm
Everlasting depression
Fleeting tactics, to those eyes
Without supplication,
evil in law, connecting toward prison
Come, unstoppable rain
Crimson-colored song of destruction
Have ya got "that" which lies dormant within society?
Love, battle of wits, tension
Egoistically bent sadist
Iron hammer of fragmented evil
Lives snatched away
Truth-debate-peace-error, regret,
Many thousands of years, pity
Violence, turbulent times, despair and pain
It's an unstoppable fate, chained death
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Posted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:26 pm
I really like your poem. Its very good. I think that an acceptable name for it should be "unstoppable" "Rain that comes down" "fate" or "chained down". I think any one of those would sound good.
Hope I helped.
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