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PostPosted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 4:34 pm


Hello. First off, Hi, I'm Aeryn.

Second, I wrote this song for a project I'm doing with a friend for a class. Basically, we have to write a song. Here are the lyrics I've written. My friend and I still have to put it to music but I want to finalize the lyrics first. Any comments and suggestions would be much appreciated. Thanks!

Shadow

You can run
And you can hide,
But you can’t escape the darkness of your life.
You can find a way to leave it,
But it always seems to find you in the end.
(A shadow of your existence)

So go ahead and pretend
That you’ll be alright again.
You can move on,
But you know there will always be something behind you.
(A shadow)
Following you.
(A shadow of your existence)

You can lie
And you can cheat,
But you can’t avoid the shadows in your past.
You can find a refuge from it,
But it always seems to find you in the end.
(A shadow of your existence)

So go ahead and pretend
That you’ll be alright again.
You can move on,
But you know there will always be something behind you.
(A shadow)
Following you.
(A shadow of your existence)

And you must realize
That we all dance with our devils sometime
Now you can see
What it is you were meant to be

But you lost it
It faded
Gone away
Forever
A shadow of your existence

So go ahead and pretend
That you’ll be alright again.
You can move on,
But you know there will always be something behind you.
(A shadow)
Go ahead
Pretend you’ll be alright
Move on
But there’s something behind you.
(A shadow of your existence)
A memory
(A shadow of your existence)
A remnant
(A shadow of your existence)
A shadow

You can’t escape it…
PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 4:54 pm


Well, first off, HELLO AERYN!! XD

Second, wow. I really like the lyrics you wrote. REALLY good. I'm not one to criticise or to ask for suggestions cause I don't write songs, and I'm not good at it, but from what I see...looks like it'd be a wonderful song. I'd like to hear it once you guys put it to music. XD

Oh, and love your signature. Breaking Benjamin. XD Is that an inspiration for a line or two in the lyrics by chance?

Isis375
Captain


e c h o of ages - -

PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 6:22 pm


Yeah. I guess that's what happens when you're stuck on a bus for five hours with nothing but a laptop and an ipod, and then you try to write a song while listening to the ipod. You get some interesting, somewhat mixed results.
PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 6:36 pm


that was totally wicked

Malicious-Dreamer

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