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Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 2:07 pm
I suppose I'll make a DBZ fanfic, using my hyperactive imagination. Go ahead and comment on it, I don't care if you criticize it, just PLEASE be appropriate and say something that might make the hyperactive-yet-not-so-good-at-listening-to-me imagination of mine work for something other than making a bad joke! TO CREW/CAPTAIN OF GUILD: Delete if you guys want, I just couldn't keep waiting.
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Well, everything was going according to the anime and manga up until the point that Raditz gave Goku the offer to join the Saiyans. Well, someone decided to twist the plot and make it so that instead, Goku went and killed a hundred humans and put them on the beach. And since I would prefer not to put anything bad in these posts, I'll follow the English versions of the characters, so that way I can avoid it. I'll start this at the point where Goku has already left, and yes, Vegeta and Nappa will still come for the Dragonballs. And yes, they are still going to come in one year.
Part 1: Super Saiyan Gohan? Piccolo, don't kill yourself training him! Gohan was crying as Piccolo landed on the beach. "Someone shut that kid up!" he said. Krillin and Bulma were trying to comfort and defend him. "Piccolo, you might be Kami's evil side, but can't you see he just lost his father and have enough heart not to be so rude?!" Bulma yelled at Piccolo. Suddenly Gohan stopped crying and got an angry look on his face. He forcibly pushed Krillin and Bulma away from him using his ki. He glared at the ground. "I didn't lose my father," he said. "HE ABANDONED ME!!" Gohan's ki rose, and he now had his energy flaming around him, golden. His eyes turned green, his hat blew away into Master Roshi's hands, and his hair became gold. It was so much that even Kami and King Kai (who didn't get introduced until now because Goku never died) noticed. Raditz's scouter picked up the power level, and it exploded in his face. Both he and Goku wondered why there would be someone that powerful on Earth and neither of them noticed until now! They decided to keep going, but they were having second thoughts about it...
Gohan started calming down. He maintained his form, however. Piccolo was frozen in shock. Why, though Piccolo, why would this little brat be so powerful?! He then realized that this was Goku's son! Yea, he missed hearing that Gohan was Goku's son. But he didn't miss the fact that the two more powerful Saiyans would come in a year and that Goku was a Saiyan. Piccolo moved toward Gohan. Krillin tried to defend Gohan, but Piccolo simply said, "You shouldn't go through the trouble of trying to defend that brat. Right now, he's more powerful than I am, but something tells me he can't control his power yet." Piccolo grabbed Gohan by the tail, and it just came off! He was startled for a moment, then Gohan returned to normal, and, exhausted, fainted. Piccolo said to the rest,"He doesn't have control yet. If the Saiyans that are coming in a year are more powerful than Raditz, we're going to need his help. And in order to get it, he's going to have to get stronger and learn how to control that power he just showed." "I'm afraid you'll have to ask the boy's mother about that," Master Roshi said. "I'm not asking. You're going to have to say it yourself. Especially if we want to live through this." "You're actually going to help save the Earth?" "Only because I want to conquer it." There was silence.
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Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 3:19 pm
That's pretty good. Nothing bad is really jumping out at me right now, so I say, continue what you've been doing so far, since it's working.
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Posted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 3:42 pm
Aye, but you're forgetting an important part. Without Goku, how can there be Goten to fuse with Trunks to make my fave Gotenks???
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Posted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 9:00 pm
Please don't try to question the creative workings of a writer's mind. Their story=their universe=their rules.
Also, and please don't reply to this statement, if there's no Goku, Buu can't be revived, thus removing the need for the existence of Gotenks.
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Posted: Sun Mar 16, 2008 7:20 pm
... Wow, didn't think people would actually say something about this. Oh, and Goku does show up later in this, I'm just not there yet.
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Uhh... I think I'll just skip to the part where Piccolo drops Gohan in the water, like the anime did...
Part 2: Day One of Training! Well... sort of. "Wake up!" Piccolo ordered. Gohan remained asleep. You couldn't blame him; he was a little kid, after all. Piccolo ordered Gohan to wake up again, a lot louder this time. Gohan simply rolled over. "You spoiled little brat! WAKE UP!" Piccolo threw him in the water, and this time Gohan woke up and started splashing around like crazy until he realized the water wasn't at the point where he had to swim to move yet. He dropped onto his bottom and saw Piccolo towering over him. "Y-you... y-you're P-Piccolo!" Gohan was scared. "Stop trembling and get up!" Piccolo said. Gohan got up, but was still trembling in fear. "I said stop trembling!" He immediately stopped trembling. "You know about the other Saiyans that are coming a year from now, right?" Silence. "ANSWER ME!" yelled Piccolo. "Y-yes!" "Better. Your father isn't going to be with us this time, regardless of whether he's dead or alive. So instead, you're going to take his place." Gohan winced when Piccolo mentioned his father. "But... why do I have to fight? I... I'm still---" "Would you rather die knowing at least you tried to fight back or die shamefully as a coward?!" Silence again. I... don't want to fight... but..., Gohan was thinking. "If you're going to end up dead either way, then why not try to fight for your own life? I don't care if you're fighting for your father's old ideals. Just as long as you fight," Piccolo said to him. "You've got a lot of power in you. You just have to learn to control it." "Huh? Me?" "Don't play dumb. Earlier at the beach, before you fainted, how did you feel?" "...I felt angry." "Anything else?" "...well... I did get a weird feeling. Like... like I wanted to... to..." Gohan's voice faded, and he got a scared and guilty look on his face. "Like I wanted to kill everyone in sight." Piccolo was somewhat surprised, most likely because Gohan's father at one point never had any urge to kill anyone, just the urge to fight, nothing more. So it was strange for the (formerly) peace-loving Goku's son to want to hurt others so badly. At the same time, it was not so strange, since Gohan was still very young and didn't know exactly what it was he wanted, and it was convenient (sp?) because now if Piccolo died, but had trained Gohan to be just like him, Gohan could fulfill Piccolo's wish in his place. Piccolo picked Gohan up, saying, "You didn't mention feeling powerful. You should have. And I'll show you that power." Piccolo threw Gohan at a nearby mountain, hard. "WAAAAAAAAHHHH!!!" Gohan cried as he flew toward it full force. Fear overwhelmed him, and his first thought was of Goku. Then, remembering Goku's betrayal, anger also overcame him, and he once again transformed into a Super Saiyan, and blew apart not only the mountain he was headed toward, but also most of the mountains surrounding it, and created a huge crater. Gohan calmed down slightly, still Super Saiyan, and tears flowing down his cheeks. He fell onto his butt, calming down even more, trying to maintain the Super Saiyan state. However, he still couldn't bear the power quite yet, and so returned to normal and fainted again.
Meanwhile, Goku and Raditz were now too far away to sense Gohan's second transformation, and arrived at the planet that Vegeta and Nappa were on. "Hmmph. So you brought Kakarot," Vegeta said. "Are we ready now?" "I am. But Kakarot isn't," replied Raditz. "I can fight fine!" "What, in those Earth clothes? Get into some Saiyan armor! You'll embarrass us," said Raditz.
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:30 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 9:18 pm
evlkyubigrl I suppose I'll make a DBZ fanfic, using my hyperactive imagination. Go ahead and comment on it, I don't care if you criticize it, just PLEASE be appropriate and say something that might make the hyperactive-yet-not-so-good-at-listening-to-me imagination of mine work for something other than making a bad joke! TO CREW/CAPTAIN OF GUILD: Delete if you guys want, I just couldn't keep waiting. ================================================ Well, everything was going according to the anime and manga up until the point that Raditz gave Goku the offer to join the Saiyans. Well, snoomeone decided to twist the plot and make it so that instead, Goku went and killed a hundred humans and put them on the beach. And since I would prefer not to put anything bad in these posts, I'll follow the English versions of the characters, so that way I can avoid it. I'll start this at the point where Goku has already left, and yes, Vegeta and Nappa will still come for the Dragonballs. And yes, they are still going to come in one year. Part 1: Super Saiyan Gohan? Piccolo, don't kill yourself training him!Gohan was crying as Piccolo landed on the beach. "Someone shut that kid up!" he said. Krillin and Bulma were trying to comfort and defend him. "Piccolo, you might be Kami's evil side, but can't you see he just lost his father and have enough heart not to be so rude?!" Bulma yelled at Piccolo. Suddenly Gohan stopped crying and got an angry look on his face. He forcibly pushed Krillin and Bulma away from him using his ki. He glared at the ground. "I didn't lose my father," he said. "HE ABANDONED ME!!" Gohan's ki rose, and he now had his energy flaming around him, golden. His eyes turned green, his hat blew away into Master Roshi's hands, and his hair became gold. It was so much that even Kami and King Kai (who didn't get introduced until now because Goku never died) noticed. Raditz's scouter picked up the power level, and it exploded in his face. Both he and Goku wondered why there would be someone that powerful on Earth and neither of them noticed until now! They decided to keep going, but they were having second thoughts about it... Gohan started calming down. He maintained his form, however. Piccolo was frozen in shock. Why, though Piccolo, why would this little brat be so powerful?! He then realized that this was Goku's son! Yea, he missed hearing that Gohan was Goku's son. But he didn't miss the fact that the two more powerful Saiyans would come in a year and that Goku was a Saiyan. Piccolo moved toward Gohan. Krillin tried to defend Gohan, but Piccolo simply said, "You shouldn't go through the trouble of trying to defend that brat. Right now, he's more powerful than I am, but something tells me he can't control his power yet." Piccolo grabbed Gohan by the tail, and it just came off! He was startled for a moment, then Gohan returned to normal, and, exhausted, fainted. Piccolo said to the rest,"He doesn't have control yet. If the Saiyans that are coming in a year are more powerful than Raditz, we're going to need his help. And in order to get it, he's going to have to get stronger and learn how to control that power he just showed." "I'm afraid you'll have to ask the boy's mother about that," Master Roshi said. "I'm not asking. You're going to have to say it yourself. Especially if we want to live through this." "You're actually going to help save the Earth?" "Only because I want to conquer it." There was silence.
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