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 Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 4:45 pm
"Where are you?" thought Nitez. The young girl had been searching furiously since she had found out who her real family was. So far all that she knew was that her only surviving family member was a boy named Haku,and she had seen his pictures. Living with the Uchihas was fun until she found out she wasn't one of them. Now they were dead (because of her step-brother) and Haku was her only hope left.
"I'll find you if it's the last thing I do!" she shouted remembering her beloved Uchihas when she came back home.
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Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2008 5:57 pm
Very short, your spelling and word play is very accurate, but your story is short. It doesn't give enough to make the reader interested. It seems like it would be a good story if there was more to it.
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Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:40 pm
I couldn't consider that a chapter, but nice introduction.
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