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 Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 5:43 pm
I used to have a better edited version of this poem to make it sound better, but my new edition of Microsoft Word hates me, so for now, it's lost. So, here's the slightly-not-as-good version of this poem that I wrote a while ago.
"Opium"
Imperfection could never be more perfect
Nor could a misstep seem more fluid
A vision has never been so addicting
Euphoria fills me with the sight of you
You’re my opium
You numb my aching pain
Yeah, baby, you’re my opium
And I’ll never be the same again
Just a glance, and I’m relaxed
That’s what you do to me
Yet when I don’t get a proper dose
I just need, need, need
I just want to fall asleep
So my head can fill with you
But sometimes I wish fantasies were real
So my dreams won’t tease me too
You’re my opium
You numb my aching pain
Yeah, baby, you’re my opium
And I’ll never be the same again
I’m hopelessly addicted
Sorry, I just can’t help that, see?
Because if you stepped into my shoes
You’d have no choice but to agree with me
My emotions become detached
And I fly far away
In my tempting disillusioned state I see you
And I don’t get why I can’t talk today
My stomach feels sick
And I want to run away
But I must get more opium!
It keeps my pain at bay
You’re my opium
You numb my aching pain
Yeah, baby, you’re my opium
And I’ll never be the same again
I’m feeling sicker
But seeing you makes me fly
Why is my illness returning?
Why, oh why, oh WHY?!?
Alas, I realize, as I sadly hang my head
Too much of one thing can be deadly, as they say
So, my drug, I must break this thing
So I can live to see another day
You’re my opium
I’ve become addicted to your smile
My love, my sweet, sweet opium
I won’t be seeing you for a while
Small note: I wrote this from the point of view of one of my characters, based on some of his struggle in my story. I chose the title and subject of "Opium" mostly because of an inside joke between some of my family members.... and the Wizard of Oz.... Don't ask....
So, I looked up some effects of opium and thought that it'd make a good poem, especially because the drug was once used as a painkiller in hospital, and the character that the poem is spoken from is a healer, so I thought that that seemed fit.
Anyways, post your comments and critiques about this poem.
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Posted: Wed Jan 09, 2008 11:00 am
*the audience stands, clapping enthusiastically*
I liked it! mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Jan 11, 2008 6:26 pm
DragoLee *the audience stands, clapping enthusiastically* I liked it! mrgreen O.O Really? Wow, thank you ^_^
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