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DragoLee

PostPosted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 6:54 pm


So herein I have put/will put some poetry I've written. I'm debating having some things published, but I don't know if this stuff's good enough.
Rains of Sorrow
Then comes the rains...
a mother holds a blanket
weeping silently when finally
her tears have all run dry.

The rains cry when she cannot,
and a father sits alone again.
He watches countless raindrops fall,
understands from whence they came.

The lightning crashed, a baby cried.
The baby cries no more today
but still the thunder echoes.
Time is stopped and slipping by...

The timelessness of life and death
are painfully present in the silence
between the flash of new lightning
and the crashing end of thunder.

Swallow the sob there in your throat,
the skies cry often enough for us.
Embrace the pain and keep it close,
but be not frozen by black roses.



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Duality of Want
Your scent intoxicating,
your touch, innocence
M-make my blood sing.
You should not be here.

She stinks of fear.
Her skin so soft;
tear it from her eyes,
let her see you


Curling up against me,
wanting a protector.
Y-ou've found shelter,
shade beneath the devil.

Foolish little b***h!
why don't you show her?
let her hear us laughing
at her foolishness!


My arms strain for the effort,
mustn't harm the pretty flower.
B-but you've already fallen.
I just haven't shown you yet.
 
PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 7:21 am


Mmm... I don't know what to say. All I can say is that I really liked the first one, the second one didn't really make sense to me, but I suppose it's because I'm not really a poetry person. Good luck with publishing though!
P.S. I liked the first because of all the imagery used. It was very captivating and I could see all the lines clearly in my head. Good job. I suppose the black roses mentioned at the end symbolizes death?

~.Kaarii.~


DragoLee

PostPosted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 5:42 am


redface well...suffice to say if it seems unclear then either I've failed to communicate ti well, or...you haven't yet stumbled across the darker sides of want. I wrote this one to try to capture the way a friend of mine handles himself around women. Creepy guy.

and yes, the black roses signify death, more specifically of one who was loved.  
PostPosted: Fri Jan 11, 2008 6:31 pm


*comments on Dualty of Want*
I like how the feel of it changes every stanza. Like, in the first stanza, it was calm-ish and seemingly gentle. And then in the next one, it sounds so much harsher, and then back to calm, and then harsh again. I'm probably explaining this in the worst way possible, so I'll just sum this up by saying that it was really well-worded and I liked it. 3nodding

Katie Sea

Profitable Prophet


DragoLee

PostPosted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:41 pm


An tho Sleep drags his hooks
heavy upon mine eyes,
O Muse, you hold me nigh.
How cruel, this attraction.

Fine whiskey warms whilst
slumber beckons gently;
you luxuriate in the ether,
sensuous essence bound to pen.

How can I resist you?
Tell me O Muse, I beg thee.
How fickle, O how cruel
a mistress ye can be.
 
PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 11:16 am


Don't cowards die
the slowest death?
Taste their venom,
taint us all.

We fight for our last breath,
this stealing death,
this senseless terror.
Are we all yellow inside?

From mere dust we came,
worms braving the world.
Now ancient inside, forlorn.
To dust we fear to turn.

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What must it be to live,
born a falling raindrop?
Falling so fast through your life;
where shall you decide to fall?

With others like you,
grass or field or road?
Will you drum upon my roof?
Will you kiss my daughters' cheeks?

Wash me clean of humanity!!
drown me, that I may rise anew;
Quench my spirit's thirst for rain,
lips raised cracked to an endless sky.
 

DragoLee


DragoLee

PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 11:25 am


Sleep wants naught to do with me,
seeing the mark upon my brow.
I am cursed to feel and write,
paint my soul upon the page.

unspoken reveries, ghostly now
sweeping down my spine
visit my penman's hands,
pricks and jabs and cricks.

The price of expression,
this crackling of my bones.
Someday I'll rest 'neath earth
entombed with pen and paper.
 
PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 5:37 am


Insomnia is a fact of life sometimes, non?

They're good...of course. The darker one, the one that is the fight between bloodlust and lust/love, reminds me of some of the things my bffl writes occasionally....she can be...creepy to.

My favorite is prob'ly the latest, smile


Keep it up-seriously

-E

White Dragon Empress


13Toxic_Tears13

PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 8:02 pm


I really like your style~! I have a couple of my poems published. It's hard to choose which ones you think should be and which ones aren't quite good enough. I struggled with that when I had to write about a dozen poems in two weeks. It was hard to look for inspiration, and for a while I thought that I lost my gift of writing. When this happens, don't give up. Keep pushing on and write no matter what you're thinking or feeling at that moment. Just pick up a pen and let your heart do the talking!



Keep Writing~!
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