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~.Kaarii.~

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Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2007 5:38 pm

This is an excerpt from a story I'm writing called "Little White Lies" which is the sixth book in a series that I'm writing called "Unforgotten Lives". Tell me what you think...

The pain hurt far too much to be real. She thought he had loved her, no, she knew he had loved her. So why would he do that? Why would he do the worst thing possible, the only thing that would make her hate him despite the fact that she loved him? Why?
She felt her heart closing up, the tears forming in her eyes, and her feet sprinting as fast as they could away - away from him.

Depression and sadness sank into her skin making her feel more lonely than ever. Riley had been one of her best friends, yet she'd still betrayed her. Even if it was only that one time. It was something she would never forgive.

Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2007 6:41 pm

I'm impressed. Makes me wanna read that book of yours. XD

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~.Kaarii.~

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Posted: Sat Dec 29, 2007 4:18 pm

Thanks! I still have yet to finish it...

Posted: Sun Dec 30, 2007 9:02 pm

I see great potential in you, Kaari. You may grow better as you get older. When you are finished with this story, I would very much enjoy reading it.