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 Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 9:59 pm
Here is some general info before I start posting the actual story:
Length: 30 Chapters
Rating: PG/PG-13; It's not bad, but I wouldn't say it's a kid's story
Past Rating: I have yet to get 1 bad comment on this story
OCs (And first appearance/mention):
Solari Uchiha - Chapter 1
Senshi Takanata - Chapter 15/16 (I will check later)
Chyako-iemoto - I will check later
Ara Takanata - Mentioned first in chapter 15/16
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Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 10:12 pm
Any foreign language stuff will be in parenthesis or be *'d and mentioned at the bottom of my postChapter 1 Solari jumped down half a flight of stairs shouting. “It’s about frickin' time!” she shouted.
“Nee-chan*, what are you shouting about. I wanted to sleep,” Konohamaru said, rubbing his eyes.
Ebisu came out of another room, across the hall from Konohamaru. “Honorable granddaughter, he’s right. It’s much too early to be awake for people who don’t have to be.”
Solari glanced at a clock on the wall. “Oh no! I’m gonna be late. Bye otouto-kun**! Bye Ebisu-sensei!” Solari waved as she ran out the door, tying her forehead protector on as she ran.
It was going to be a good day, she could tell. She was going to get her team and begin her career as a Konoha shinobi. Almost nothing could ruin this day.
When Solari reached the familiar classroom in the Academy where she has spent the past 4 years she was pleased to see an empty seat next to her best friend, Hyuuga Hinata.
“Hey, Hinata-chan,” she said, sitting down next to Hinata.
“Ohayo (Good Morning) Solari-chan,” Hinata mumbled.
“So, who do you hope is going to be in your team?” Solari asked, brushing her wispy bangs out of her eyes.
“Oh, um,” Hinata blushed. “I’m really hoping that Naruto-kun is–”
The rest of Hinata’s sentence was drowned out by a shout that could be heard across the village. “NARUTO! YOU KISSED SASUKE!”
Solari looked around to find the source of her newly acquired migraine. Sure enough, Haruno Sakura was staring at the two boys, fuming.
“I thought Naruto was weird, but that just crosses a line,” Ino said disgusted. All the girls behind her nodded vigorously.
“Okay, settle down everyone,” Iruka walked into the room and everyone took their seats. “As you know today you are going to be assigned to your teams. Each team will be lead by a Jounin. Now if everyone could stand up. We changed one small thing from last year, due to someone,” he glared pointedly at Naruto and everyone laughed, “who tried to sneak in and become a ninja before they graduated.”
As the class stood up conversation broke out and Iruka had to quiet them down again.
“Okay then. As I call your name please sit down. Team 8: Aburame Shino, Hyuuga Hinata, and Inuzuka Kiba.” Hinata sat down, looking disappointed. “Team 10: Yamanaka Ino, Nara Shikamaru, and Akimichi Choji.”
“You kidding me,” Ino mumbled as she took her seat right behind Solari. Solari turned to face her, a smug look on her face which Ino returned.
A few more teams were announced. Finally, only four people were left standing.
“Team 7: Uzumaki Naruto, Uchiha Sasuke.” Naruto mumbled something as he sat down. “Haruno Sakura and Honorable Granddaughter Solari.”
“Oh my God,” Solari said. With a very obvious gesture towards Sakura, she said, “I’m on the same team as the forehead. I thought nothing was going to ruin today.”
Solari smiled to herself. Even though Sakura didn’t respond, Solari could tell that she was furious.
“Okay, now we are going to have quick break and after that, each team will meet their Jonin sensei.”
* * *
Almost every team had left the classroom with their sensei. The only team left was team 7
“Um, so, since our sensei isn’t here yet, does anyone have anything to say?” Sakura asked nervously.
“I do,” Sasuke said.
“Okay Sasuke-kun, everyone listen we’re a team now, we have to pay attention to each other,” Sakura said, staring avidly at Sasuke.
“I became a ninja to get revenge. If any of you get in my way I will bring you down.” A stunned silence followed these words.
“If any of you call me ‘honorable granddaughter’ I’ll fly off the edge and you’ll be sorry,” Solari said to break the silence.
“If you guys stand in my way of becoming Hokage – Hey what’s so funny?”
“You Hokage?” Sakura said through her laughs.
“You need to be a good ninja first.”
Solari and Sakura were laughing so hard they fell out of their chairs. At that moment the door slid open and a man stood in the door.
“I hope I’m not too late. My name is Hatake Kakashi.”
“No problem you’re only two hours late sensei,” Sakura said, annoyed.
“Oh, you know traffic.”
“Traffic? You’re kidding right?” Solari said disbelievingly.
Kakashi sighed. “Just follow me.” He led them up to the roof of the Academy and motioned for them to sit down on the benches. “I thought we should start out with some introduction, just to get to know each other better. You know, likes, dislikes, dreams for you future, hobbies, and stuff like that.”
“You go first,” Naruto said.
“Me? Fine, my name is Hatake Kakashi. I have no desire to tell you guys about my likes and dislikes. Dreams for the future? Hmmm… Well, I have lots of hobbies…” his voice trailed off, leaving them in silence.
“So all we learned is his name,” Sakura mumbled, Naruto nodded in agreement.
“I’ll go then. My name is Uzumaki Naruto. I like Cup Ramen! What I like even more is the ramen from Ichiraku Ramen Bar that Iruka sensei bought me. What I hate is waiting the three minutes for the Cup Ramen to cook. My hobby is eating tons of Cup Ramen! And my dream for the future is to become Hokage! Then all the people in our village will acknowledge and respect me!”
Kakashi shrugged and nodded in Sasuke’s direction. “What about you?”
Sasuke had his hands crossed in front of his mouth and when he spoke, it was in a cold, emotionless voice. “My name is Uchiha Sasuke. I don’t really like anything. I dislike many things. I don’t really have any hobbies. My goal for the future is to restore my clan, and destroy a certain someone.”
“Wow, that’s depressing,” Solari said. “Why do girls like you so much?”
“Hey! Don’t say that to Sasuke-kun!” Sakura said, she sounded as offended as if Solari had insulted her personally.
“I can say whatever I want to him. You don’t control me,” Solari said, glaring at Sakura in return.
“If I did, you would be dead right now.”
Kakashi pointed lazily at Sakura. “You next.” Clearly, he wanted the argument to stop.
Sakura nodded. “I’m Haruno Sakura. What I like is…well…the person I like is…” She glanced at Sasuke.
Solari threw her arms in the air. “This is it. This is what’s going to kill me,” she said with a mock tone of exasperation.
Sakura glared at Solari before continuing. “My dream for the future is…” She glanced at Sasuke again. This time, Naruto leaned in front of him and waved at Sakura. “I really dislike Naruto.”
Solari looked around. “I’m the only one left then, alright. My name is Solari. I’m the honorable granddaughter and I hate it. I really love being a ninja. I love mastering a new jutsu. I don’t really have any hobbies. In the future I want to influence people and be a powerful ninja. I have a really long list of stuff I don’t like, but at the top is probably people who call me ‘honorable granddaughter’ instead of using my name, and the Uchiha Sasuke fan club.”
“There a club?” Sasuke asked.
“There might as well be.”
“Well, now that’s over with you can go home. But meet back here tomorrow morning at 9 o’ clock for our first mission.”
Solari got up and left the rooftop, closely behind Sasuke. She saw the fan symbol on the back of his shirt and stared at it. She didn’t even notice where she was going as she followed Sasuke through the village. Fortunately, he was passing by the Konoha Shinobi headquarters where she lived.
“Honorable granddaughter!” Ebisu called from a second floor window.
Solari’s fists clenched. “My name is Solari!” She shouted up at him. “So stop calling me that!”
Ebisu ignored her response. “Hokage-sama wishes to speak with you in his office.”
Solari nodded and entered the building. She reached her grandfathers office without speaking to anyone and pulled the door open. “Grandfather, you needed to see me?”
“Yes I did.” He put down the roster he was reading. “You have known for a long time about your adoption but we never told you about your parents. Now that you are a ninja you are old enough to find out”~~~~~~~~~~~ *nee-chan = the informal way of saying "big sister"
**otouto-kun = a way of saying "little brother"
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Posted: Fri Nov 30, 2007 12:37 am
I like it 3nodding
Not too much to edit, but I noticed a few minor things.Quote: “It’s about frickin' time!” she shouted. Quote: “Okay Sasuke-kun . Everyone listen becuase we’re a team now, and we have to pay attention to each other,” Sakura said, staring avidly at Sasuke. Quote: “You ? Hokage?” Sakura asked through her laughs. Quote: “No problem you’re only two hours late sensei,” Sakura said, annoyed. Quote: “So all we learned is his name,” Sakura mumbled . Naruto nodded in agreement. Quote: “Wow, that’s depressing,” Solari said. “Why do girls like you so much?” “Hey! Don’t say that to Sasuke-kun!” Sakura exclaimed, she sounded as offended as if Solari had insulted her personally. “I can say whatever I want to him. You don’t control me,” Solari said, glaring at Sakura in return.
So, all-in-all it was really wasn't much, but hopefully it helped.
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 2:28 pm
Thanks for the tips. I'm not to great with the grammar stuff. I'm glad you like it.
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2008 7:28 pm
Chapter 2
“My family? Like my birth family?” Solari asked amazed as she sat down opposite the Hokage.
He nodded. “What other family is there to tell about? Yes, I feel like you are old enough to know, but only if you want me to tell you.”
“Of course I want to know. Please tell me.”
Sandaime reached into a drawer of his desk as he spoke. “Don’t expect an extravagant story. It really is a short one.” He placed a small black box on his desk. “Twelve years ago, you were brought to me with this box. It raised a many questions as it answered.”
Solari reached slowly for the box. When the Hokage didn’t try to stop her, she picked it up and opened it. Inside was a necklace and a note. She picked up the note and read it.
‘Please take care of our daughter Solari.
-Uchiha Fugaku & Uchiha Mikoto’
She put down the note and took out the necklace. It was a small silver chain with a pendant on it. The pendant was the symbol of the Uchiha clan, the same thing on the back of Sasuke’s shirt. On the back of the pendant, in simple yet beautiful letters, was inscribed Uchiha Solari.
“Fugaku and Mikoto were the parents of Sasuke and Itachi,” Sandaime explained. “Unfortunately, they passed away some time ago. They were killed, along with the rest of the clan, by Itachi. The only ones still alive are Itachi, Sasuke, and yourself.” He paused to think. “In fact, unless I am mistaken, the same day Sasuke suffered the pain of losing his family, you disappeared as well.”
Solari nodded, she remembered that day well. She had suffered so much pain but she didn’t know why. It hadn’t been a physical pain either, it was more like a pain in her heart. She hadn’t understood why that was happening.
“What do I do now?”
“The way I see it, you have reached a fork in the road, so to speak. You can choose to continue your life the way it is now, or you can tell Sasuke that the two of you are twins.”
Solari jumped from her chair. “Twins? What do you mean twins?”
Sandaime smiled. “I mean, you two are twins. I wouldn’t think that would be confusing for you.”
Solari sank back down in her seat looking embarrassed. “Of course it’s not. I was just shocked, is all.” She sighed. “So we’re twins and we’re on the same team, small world huh?”
The Hokage smiled. “Not quite. Don’t forget that it is the duty of the Hokage to create your squads.”
Solari nodded and stood up. “I need to think this out. You think I should tell Sasuke, don’t you?”
The Hokage shook his head. “I can’t say. He is your brother after all.”
Feeling it was odd to call Sasuke her brother, Solari didn’t respond. She picked up the box and, after first checking for the letter and necklace, left the room.
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