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This is a poem I wrote, inspired by my own hometown.

Please give constructive criticism, and just tell me what you think!

Hey, ******** welcome to Hell,
If you need a hand
Just give me a bell.

Arsehole of the world,
There's nothing to love,
No peace, no order,
No help from above,
City of the dead,
The sun doesn't shine,
On this excuse for
A town, walk the ********, live
and die in this place,
Nothing good here,
Potential erased.

Hey ******** welcome to hell,
This place is no good
And all is not well.

You walk through the streets
And what do you see?
Drugs, violence, gang wars,
Arson, robbery,
No place for good guys,
Screw good intention,
This cannot be saved
By intervention
From God, Jesus, or
Anything at all,
If you don't like it,
Then give me a call.

Hey ******** welcome to hell,
Everyone's evil,
And no-one will tell.

Murder on the streets,
No-one truly cares,
No-one would help them,
'cause nobody dares,
This is now your life,
Can't leave it behind,
Because if you do
You'll surely find
That your mind wanders
Back to this bad place,
But when you come back,
You can't show your face,
'Cause if you do then
You really won't last,
You gotta be strong,
You gotta be fast
To live in this town
And survive it well,
Hey ******** welcome to Hell.


Also, I will reserve a post for any explanation of parts people may not properly understand, and for answers to questions.

I love it!

Wow... Someone actually read this!

Glad you enjoyed it, and also, i've actually offered to let a local band I know use it as a song, when they get enough practice to use original songs... Also offered to write songs for them.

Should be cool, if they take me up on the offer!

Cool. I like it.