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 Posted: Wed Aug 22, 2007 9:53 pm
I was rummaging though my old binders and i came across my old poetry notebook. As i read through them (my poems) i came across a few i thought i would share. Comment if you want to.
What I've Done
Completely overwhelmed by desire to die..........
Holding blade to wrist, this could end with a twist.........
No one thought of me as being this ******** up, now their seeing........
Deeper and deeper in my psyche, suprised to see the real me...........
Blade and all, ready to fall........
Stream of blood down my hand I can't deny, the bloody knife I won't hide..........
Look what I've done for you...........
Look What I've Done..........
Emo Love
Bloody knife, bloody wrist.
scream in pain, slice and twist.
It hurts so good, the pain you caused
These scars I hide beneath bloody gauze
I wear black clothes and black make-up
To hide the pain of our break-up
When you left I cried and cried....
and I wished that I had died....
I hurt so bad I even tried
to take my own life..... commit suicide....
But now we're back together again
hiding scars outside and within
The love we both feel
helping those damn scars Heal
A love so intense..... so fresh and new.......
you love me.... and I almost died........
For you.....
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Posted: Wed Aug 22, 2007 10:11 pm
Very depressing, but I like the first one better. It is very well written. Except all the .... after each line. It is unnecessary.
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Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 1:02 pm
I don't really know what to say cause I'm not much of a poetry person but they seem good to me.
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Posted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 11:15 am
seriouslybored I don't really know what to say cause I'm not much of a poetry person but they seem good to me. indeed
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 7:18 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 9:48 am
i think i liked the second one better, but the first was really good. very ough desission (i am no good at spelling xp )
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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 6:24 pm
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