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 Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 4:31 pm
KharneBH By all means, do show me. Would you mind if I show one of my earliest works? It sucks out loud to be honest, but I don't have the heart to change it. Oh, if you want to see an example of something I did, just look at my siggy, below the banner. Yes Christopher... I'd love to see your work... and I noticed your sig a long time ago... I love it.
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 4:38 pm
The Doors to Darkness
Through the doorway I came,
And into the small tides I strode,
The great heat and screams from the first door sang,
"Pass not through these doors for these are the painful roads,"
These wails though warning, beckoned me on to see.
I ignored the painful cries of warning,
As I entered the first door of anguish the ground gave way,
And into darkness I fell.
When I woke I saw tortures so many,
Horrible acts committed to each fallen one,
I screamed in horror and disgust at those laughing at the fun.
I fell once more into a another pit of nothing to find myself,
Outside the two doors once more.
Once again, I heard the woeful cries,
"Venture not into the gates of perpetual pain,"
The pull of the beckoning tone pulled harder than once before.
The darkness consumed me and I was wisked away to much more.
This time the horrors greater than before,
Wails so loud they were greater than a great storm.
The cries now told me,
"If your ways do not change you shall have your own chains here,"
And I fell for the last time.
I woke, terrified in my bed,
Cold sweat, burning blood all at once,
With my dream's warning beating in my head,
I know the path that I have been walking was wrong.
At that time I changed so I would not cry with those sad souls.
Like I said before, this is the worst of all my things.
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 4:42 pm
If that's your worst, then your best must rival Eliot himself!!! This is freaking awesome! Man... I love it dude! I just posted everything I'm willing to release on page two.
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 4:55 pm
I saw all of them. I skimmed through most of them and I find them worthy of compiling into your own little book. Please please, my stuff isn't that great.
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:37 pm
crying *is outdistanced by a VERY long shot* you guys are way better than me and the other amateurs! *pauses and reflects* oh well just another challenge I enjoyed ya'll's poems very much....hmmm as a rough est. could you tell me how many poems you have...I know I have over 125...I just need to find them all...
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:41 pm
I have very very few. I have not been writing very long. Most of what I do are just a few lines long. I have plenty of little sayings that I use, but very few real poems.
You really think I am any good? I find that your work is pretty good and much better than my own.
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:43 pm
Yeah... what I have there is most everything... some of it I won't give out for personal reasons... one I won't give out because it was for somebody... and I'm letting her do with it as she pleases... and she only wants to keep it within her closest friends.
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:44 pm
fine don't answer...didn't want one anyway *flies off*
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:46 pm
Hey, I answered... and Christopher said he didn't have many... don't leave...
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:49 pm
*blank look* I kinda was looking for numbers...lol my bad I'm sorry. I can't be on for long and I won't post more poems till tomorrow...well no I won't I'm going to a bonfire at school so I won't post till...Friday night prolly...idk we'll see till then if you wanna read any go to the thread or journal see ya guys *waves and heads into the mountains((that's my "home" from Dante's thread lol I brought it over))*
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:50 pm
Dante Deus Hey, I answered... and Christopher said he didn't have many... don't leave... If you want a finite number, than it would have to be a range of 3-10. Like I said, not many. I don't really keep a count. HEY JOSH, SPEAKTH NOT THE NAME CHRISTOPHER!!
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:52 pm
*giggles* you don't like it? well I don't like mine either so I guess that's fair
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:52 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:56 pm
I like both your names... and I like mine... *shudder* Chris, should you speak it you will freeze in the deepest pit of hell.
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:59 pm
Dante Deus I like both your names... and I like mine... *shudder* Chris, should you speak it you will freeze in the deepest pit of hell. At least you spoke of the correct hel. I need to remake one of my best pieces of artwork ever. It had a sign in the background pointing into a hole saying, "Hel, colder than the fakes." There was also a building called "Loki's Chaos R Us." I enjoyed making it. I need to do it again. I just know you are called Joshua. I cannot remember your other name. Oh and I LIKE TO POKE! *pokes*
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