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 Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:52 pm
Conami Well thats a relief. Thanks for the words of comfort. Would you be up to reading the rest of chapter 2 tonight or would you like to wait until I finish chapter three? Im trying not to post to ahead of myself, I want to try and always be at least one chapter ahead of the readers, but I am so happy that someones' reading and liking it xd I just want to explode! Of course I like it and I'm sure that there are others reading it who like it too. It's up to you how much of it you post though.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:57 pm
Im completely ok with it. Well here is the rest of chapter 2.
*caution, fluff invovled, I hope I didnt go outta character.*
I held tightly to my towel and briefly scanned the room.
“ Edward? ”
' This is so stupid of me. Who else would have done this? ' But he wasn't in sight. I shut and locked my door and walked over to my closet pulling it open when I reached it.
' Nope, I guess he's not in here.' I quickly changed into the suggested clothes and unlocked my door. I was hoping he would walk in, but he didn't. I opened the door and there he was; leaning against the wall across the way, looking down. He looked up at me and shook his head in laughter, smiling my favorite smile.
“ What?” I asked dumbly, to happy to really care what his answer would be.
“ You really think locking your door is going to keep me out?”
“ I didn't know that you-”
He cut me off with a long hug and all the frustration of trying to explain went away. He held my face in his hands firmly and stared into my eyes, saturating them with love and kindness. I couldn't look away, not that I wanted to in the first place.
“ Just one?” I practically begged. Edward raised his brow for a moment then smoothed it out as he leaned in for the first kiss of the day. Our lips touched and it was like electricity flowing through my lips. The power was like a magnet; I couldn't take my lips away from his. Al last I threw myself into the kiss.
I was becoming very experienced with my self control. It didn't take long for me to realize that if I where to loose my self control, Edward would loose his as well, and only seconds after would our kiss be broken. So I focused on keeping my levels under control, but in the meantime, I tried my hardest to keep Edwards' head in a daze. That seemed to make the kiss last longer, frequently trying new techniques on him to see what worked best. I settled with multiple kisses.
I carefully moved my lips around his stone ones, opening them ever so slightly and closing them to seal away each new kiss. I pressed myself closer to his cold body, closing what little space he had originally intended to keep between us. No sooner had I down that, I felt something stiff to my back. I startled me at first but slowly I realized that it was a wall the Edward had pinned me against. He broke away from me in mid kiss, contradiction flowing through his eyes. He looked me up and down slowly before leaning closer to me again. Panting, though it wasn't a real matter of being out of breathe for him, its was a matter of my new technique working. He kissed the hollow of my neck that eventually led trails of passionate kisses from one side of my neck to my collar bone and to the other side. I let my eyes roll back into my head and I realized that my legs were trembling. With out my permission, my left leg lifted on to Edwards waist and wrapped itself around loosely. Edward had caught on quicker than I had realized what I did. He took his hands from my face and led them carefully to the pit of my arms. With out the least of effort, he picked me up an in response both my legs were wrapped tightly around his waist. His lips curved up into a wicked smile that gave the hint that this was what he intended for me to do. He pressed me lightly against the wall again and shifted his hands from the pits of my arms to my butt, holding my up effortlessly. Edward leaned in again and kissed the hollow of my neck, nibbling playfully on my earlobe and stopping himself often from aiming for my neck. Though a few playful bites did escape his approval, it didn't stop either of us. My head lulled about like a broken bobble head and I could hear Edward chuckle in his throat as he watched me. Finally I let my eyes come out from the back of my head to see Edwards face before I completely lost all of my self control, I was practically hanging on by a thread, and no doubt his was thinner.
“ How can you be so perfect at everything?” I breathed out in exhaustion.
“ Its mostly your fault.” He joked back. He pressed his lips to mine and pulled away before I could really kiss him back. Edward set my feet back onto the floor and steadied me until I had my balance back. I looked up at him from under my brow and gave him my most devilish grin.
“ Your so mean.” I joked back. I knew our fun was over and it was time to get going, but I wanted more than anything to glue our feet to the ground and not move until I was gifted just one more kiss.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 7:04 pm
Conami Im completely ok with it. Well here is the rest of chapter 2. *caution, fluff invovled, I hope I didnt go outta character.* I held tightly to my towel and briefly scanned the room. “ Edward? ” ' This is so stupid of me. Who else would have done this? ' But he wasn't in sight. I shut and locked my door and walked over to my closet pulling it open when I reached it. ' Nope, I guess he's not in here.' I quickly changed into the suggested clothes and unlocked my door. I was hoping he would walk in, but he didn't. I opened the door and there he was; leaning against the wall across the way, looking down. He looked up at me and shook his head in laughter, smiling my favorite smile. “ What?” I asked dumbly, to happy to really care what his answer would be. “ You really think locking your door is going to keep me out?” “ I didn't know that you-” He cut me off with a long hug and all the frustration of trying to explain went away. He held my face in his hands firmly and stared into my eyes, saturating them with love and kindness. I couldn't look away, not that I wanted to in the first place. “ Just one?” I practically begged. Edward raised his brow for a moment then smoothed it out as he leaned in for the first kiss of the day. Our lips touched and it was like electricity flowing through my lips. The power was like a magnet; I couldn't take my lips away from his. Al last I threw myself into the kiss. I was becoming very experienced with my self control. It didn't take long for me to realize that if I where to loose my self control, Edward would loose his as well, and only seconds after would our kiss be broken. So I focused on keeping my levels under control, but in the meantime, I tried my hardest to keep Edwards' head in a daze. That seemed to make the kiss last longer, frequently trying new techniques on him to see what worked best. I settled with multiple kisses. I carefully moved my lips around his stone ones, opening them ever so slightly and closing them to seal away each new kiss. I pressed myself closer to his cold body, closing what little space he had originally intended to keep between us. No sooner had I down that, I felt something stiff to my back. I startled me at first but slowly I realized that it was a wall the Edward had pinned me against. He broke away from me in mid kiss, contradiction flowing through his eyes. He looked me up and down slowly before leaning closer to me again. Panting, though it wasn't a real matter of being out of breathe for him, its was a matter of my new technique working. He kissed the hollow of my neck that eventually led trails of passionate kisses from one side of my neck to my collar bone and to the other side. I let my eyes roll back into my head and I realized that my legs were trembling. With out my permission, my left leg lifted on to Edwards waist and wrapped itself around loosely. Edward had caught on quicker than I had realized what I did. He took his hands from my face and led them carefully to the pit of my arms. With out the least of effort, he picked me up an in response both my legs were wrapped tightly around his waist. His lips curved up into a wicked smile that gave the hint that this was what he intended for me to do. He pressed me lightly against the wall again and shifted his hands from the pits of my arms to my butt, holding my up effortlessly. Edward leaned in again and kissed the hollow of my neck, nibbling playfully on my earlobe and stopping himself often from aiming for my neck. Though a few playful bites did escape his approval, it didn't stop either of us. My head lulled about like a broken bobble head and I could hear Edward chuckle in his throat as he watched me. Finally I let my eyes come out from the back of my head to see Edwards face before I completely lost all of my self control, I was practically hanging on by a thread, and no doubt his was thinner. “ How can you be so perfect at everything?” I breathed out in exhaustion. “ Its mostly your fault.” He joked back. He pressed his lips to mine and pulled away before I could really kiss him back. Edward set my feet back onto the floor and steadied me until I had my balance back. I looked up at him from under my brow and gave him my most devilish grin. “ Your so mean.” I joked back. I knew our fun was over and it was time to get going, but I wanted more than anything to glue our feet to the ground and not move until I was gifted just one more kiss. I don't think you went out of character. There were a few points where I thought you might, but you kept it under control and I definitely have to say that you actually seem to be improving as you write more. Even with what you've written I definitely think you're starting to develop a great style for yourself.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 7:08 pm
Thankyou, I really appreciate it, but the next chapters wont be posted that quickly now, cause I have to sit down and think of what to put in the next chapter and actually type it out. it shouldnt take me too long, but I dont think that I will have another posted by tomorrow, maybe by the weekend though, sunday at latest, hopefully my brain wont die on me mid sentance.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 7:10 pm
Conami Thankyou, I really appreciate it, but the next chapters wont be posted that quickly now, cause I have to sit down and think of what to put in the next chapter and actually type it out. it shouldnt take me too long, but I dont think that I will have another posted by tomorrow, maybe by the weekend though, sunday at latest, hopefully my brain wont die on me mid sentance. Don't worry about it. You'll post it when you post it. I don't want you to worry about deadlines and having to rush. You should enjoy writing it and giving yourself deadlines will only make it seem more like work.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 7:30 pm
Very true, but doesnt it just bother you when your really into a fanfiction and they stop...for no apparent reason. Then 2 months later, you've finally forgotten about it, and then they post a reason why stating that they had some things comeup and are no longer writing that particular fanfiction. Its so frustrating for me to read unfinished work because you never know when and if they will add more. I know Im not the only one, and so I intend to try not to be that kinda person, I would hate to frustrate my readers. I know exactly what its like, and its not pretty. You get all these withdrawl effects and whatnot...Its never work to me as long as I enjoy writng, plus Creating a reasonalbe deadline helps me to keep my chapters at a descent lenght.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 7:36 pm
Conami Very true, but doesnt it just bother you when your really into a fanfiction and they stop...for no apparent reason. Then 2 months later, you've finally forgotten about it, and then they post a reason why stating that they had some things comeup and are no longer writing that particular fanfiction. Its so frustrating for me to read unfinished work because you never know when and if they will add more. I know Im not the only one, and so I intend to try not to be that kinda person, I would hate to frustrate my readers. I know exactly what its like, and its not pretty. You get all these withdrawl effects and whatnot...Its never work to me as long as I enjoy writng, plus Creating a reasonalbe deadline helps me to keep my chapters at a descent lenght. It doesn't really bug me to much. I've had friends who'll spend weeks writing stories and then for no reason at all just stop for a few weeks or even months. I know what you mean though. I don't like it when it happens, but I just wait and hope that they'll eventually start writing it again. I'm glad that you won't do that though. I guess having some form of a deadline does help so I guess as long as it doesn't start to seem more like work than fun then that's good.
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 4:34 pm
ok heres chapter three. its kind of short, but i was sick all weekend. ENJOY.
Chapter 3.
“ Your practically glowing.” Edward pointed out, laughing as I wiped my brow in embarrassment.
He led me into the bathroom and straight to the sink. I was more than confused when he turned on the faucet and pulled a hand towel from the rack. He placed his hands onto my waist and pulled me closer to his body.
After dipping the towel in the steaming water, he ringed it out in one hand. He took hold of my hand and extended it to the center of his chest, placing the cloth on my arm and gliding it back and forth. He repeated this process with my other arm, occasionally dipping the cloth into the water. The cloth gently traced over my cheeks and jaw line, and then to my forehead. He touched the cloth to my nose and smiled my favorite smile.
“ Thats my first sponge bath.” I regretted opening my mouth.
It sounded so stupid, but I couldn't think of anything else to say. I had lost all sense of time and place when I had laid my eyes on Edward earlier. It had just hit me then.
“ Holy crow! What time is is?” I asked, panic saturating my voice.
“ Don't worry, its only 7:13. You won't be late.”
“ Not with you driving.” I agreed jokingly.
We left the bathroom and walked down the stairs and to the front door. I grabbed my rain coat and reached for my bag, but Edward was too quick. He had it slung casually over his shoulder with no intentions of giving it back until we got to school. I opened the front door and stepped out into the brisk, foggy air, waiting for Edward to lock the door. We walked together, hand in hand, until we reached his Volvo. He opened the door and waited for me to slide in before closing it. By the time I grabbed my seatbelt, he was already in the car with the key in the ignition. I buckled up as Edward pulled out of the drive way and drove down the street. We listen to Debussy and I paid more attention to Edward humming the sounds than anything else. I began to relax, tilting my head back onto the head rest and closing my eyes. It has taken a long time for me to get used to Edwards' fast driving, and let me tell you, its not easy to relax when your going 80 miles an hour down a subsection. This was one of the many times that I was happy Edward couldn't read my mind. My nerves were always shot when I got into the car with Edward. Ever since our conversation about the possibilities of him getting into an accident. He would be able to walk away, but most likely not me. At these speeds, ...I don't even want to think about it. But strangely enough, I still trust him with my life. Even with his crazy driving.
“ Are you tired?” Edward asked. I could visualize his complexed look. I open my eyes to take a peek and sure enough, he was looking at me, just as I pictured it.
“ EDWARD! Keep you eyes on the road.” I joked with him.
He seemed very amused by me and growled a playful growl. He started at me intently. A minute passed by and he still hadn't taken his eyes off mine. I was starting to feel anxious and wondered to myself if he was cheating. Using purifiale vision, or his own powers. The cheater!
“ Really, don't you think you should at least glance at the road.” I was more than anxious now.
I felt like I was in Need for Speed, a feeling I don't recommend to anyone with a weak heart. He let out a small chuckle as he watched me get more and more nervous. Finally he looked away shaking his head and smiling my favorite smile. I started to relax again, placing my head back onto the headrest and closing my eyes. I'll admit, I was a bit exhausted. My head was a cloud of pointless thoughts that didn't make sense to me. I was contemplating skipping school just so I could organize my thoughts. But that didn't even make sense. I opened my eyes to see how close we were to the school. The school was about a half mile up, and we would be there in less than two minute. Something white flashed in front of my eyes, then everything went black.
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 6:16 pm
Conami ok heres chapter three. its kind of short, but i was gone all weekend. ENJOY. Chapter 3. “ Your practically glowing.” Edward pointed out, laughing as I wiped my brow in embarrassment. He led me into the bathroom and straight to the sink. I was more than confused when he turned on the faucet and pulled a hand towel from the rack. He placed his hands onto my waist and pulled me closer to his body. After dipping the towel in the steaming water, he ringed it out in one hand. He took hold of my hand and extended it to the center of his chest, placing the cloth on my arm and gliding it back and forth. He repeated this process with my other arm, occasionally dipping the cloth into the water. The cloth gently traced over my cheeks and jaw line, and then to my forehead. He touched the cloth to my nose and smiled my favorite smile. “ Thats my first sponge bath.” I regretted opening my mouth. It sounded so stupid, but I couldn't think of anything else to say. I had lost all sense of time and place when I had laid my eyes on Edward earlier. It had just hit me then. “ Holy crow! What time is is?” I asked, panic saturating my voice. “ Don't worry, its only 7:13. You won't be late.” “ Not with you driving.” I agreed jokingly. We left the bathroom and walked down the stairs and to the front door. I grabbed my rain coat and reached for my bag, but Edward was too quick. He had it slung casually over his shoulder with no intentions of giving it back until we got to school. I opened the front door and stepped out into the brisk, foggy air, waiting for Edward to lock the door. We walked together, hand in hand, until we reached his Volvo. He opened the door and waited for me to slide in before closing it. By the time I grabbed my seatbelt, he was already in the car with the key in the ignition. I buckled up as Edward pulled out of the drive way and drove down the street. We listen to Debussy and I paid more attention to Edward humming the sounds than anything else. I began to relax, tilting my head back onto the head rest and closing my eyes. It has taken a long time for me to get used to Edwards' fast driving, and let me tell you, its not easy to relax when your going 80 miles an hour down a subsection. This was one of the many times that I was happy Edward couldn't read my mind. My nerves were always shot when I got into the car with Edward. Ever since our conversation about the possibilities of him getting into an accident. He would be able to walk away, but most likely not me. At these speeds, ...I don't even want to think about it. But strangely enough, I still trust him with my life. Even with his crazy driving. “ Are you tired?” Edward asked. I could visualize his complexed look. I open my eyes to take a peek and sure enough, he was looking at me, just as I pictured it. “ EDWARD! Keep you eyes on the road.” I joked with him. He seemed very amused by me and growled a playful growl. He started at me intently. A minute passed by and he still hadn't taken his eyes off mine. I was starting to feel anxious and wondered to myself if he was cheating. Using purifiale vision, or his own powers. The cheater! “ Really, don't you think you should at least glance at the road.” I was more than anxious now. I felt like I was in Need for Speed, a feeling I don't recommend to anyone with a weak heart. He let out a small chuckle as he watched me get more and more nervous. Finally he looked away shaking his head and smiling my favorite smile. I started to relax again, placing my head back onto the headrest and closing my eyes. I'll admit, I was a bit exhausted. My head was a cloud of pointless thoughts that didn't make sense to me. I was contemplating skipping school just so I could organize my thoughts. But that didn't even make sense. I opened my eyes to see how close we were to the school. The school was about a half mile up, and we would be there in less than two minute. Something white flashed in front of my eyes, then everything went black.
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 4:11 pm
Thanks, Im glad you like it. I personally think its not one of my better pieces, but I was bedridden all weekend. Im just glad that I managed to think of something.
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 4:53 pm
I definitely think that you're getting better. I have to say I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 11:50 pm
Thank you again. I am at another friends house during spring break and it may be a while before I can post another chapter. I feel really bad that I dont take my work with me, but it is a good thing, it gives me time to think of a bunch of diffrent things to put into my work and not have to worry about loosing it and whatnot. well i'll try to post at least some time before break is over. Much love to all the readers and more love to those who comment! heart
-Conami
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 6:21 pm
loslover Conami Ok heres the next Chapter: Chapter 2. I woke up early Friday morning. I rolled over, aimlessly looking for my clock to see what time it was. 6:08 A.M. “Great.” I mumbled. 'My alarm clock doesn't go off for another twenty-two minutes' I thought to myself. I turned back over facing my wall and tried to force myself back to sleep. 'I wish Edward could be here.' I imagined him rocking me back to sleep. Though he would fail, I was the thought that counted. There was no way I could try to go back to sleep if Edward were here. I would want to talk to him and ask him how his night was. I remembered the conversation that I had to have with Charlie a month ago. ~ ~ ~ ~ Flash back ~ ~ ~ ~ “Dad, I'm eighteen now, please, you know I deserve more respect then what your giving me.” “ Bella, I don't care if your eighteen or thirty-six, you are still my daughter, my only child, I will not loose you.” “Ch-Dad,... you wont loose me.” “ Bells, how can I make you understand?” “ How about by trusting me!” It popped out of my mouth before I could stop it. Our conversation was quite until I practically yelled that. “ Sorry.” “ I do trust you honey, but.-” “ No you don't Dad, I'm sorry but you don't. You haven't trusted me ever since Edward came along...Dad, you can't keep blaming Edward when you know that your really only mad at me.” “ You don't understand Bells, you just came back into my life, and now you keep leaving.” “ Its not like I'm leaving you forever.” I pointed out. “ Bella-” “No, listen to me now, I am old enough for a lot of things, but its my choice to do them or not. You cant protect me from something I never wanted to be protected from. I love Edward. And he loves me. I love him so much that I could marry him Dad. I've never, never felt this way. About anyone! And if it weren't for you Dad, I wouldn't have ever wanted to come here, I would have never felt something like this.” “ Bells-” “ No, I'm not done yet. I am sorry for making you worry about me so much. I'm sorry for running out these past two years...but I can handle myself now.” Everything I've ever known to be wrong was passing through my head. It felt like I had broke so many promises and rules. Everything was detached and it seemed impossible to make things connect to say to Charlie what needed to be said. “ Are you done?” Charlie asked patiently when I hadn't spoke. “ For a little while.” I tried to smile but it was to hard. “ We need to set up some ground rules, okay?” I sank back onto my bed, leaning my head up against the wall. I knew this would come eventually, and I felt prepared to negotiate. “ I guess.” I leaned across my bed and reached for the top drawer of the night stand. Inside I kept a pen and a pad of paper. I shut the top drawer and pushed up off the side of the bed with my belongings in my hand. I was prepared to take notes but Charlie threw me off guard when he laughed at my gesture. “ Okay, I'm ready.” “ One; I want the truth, at all times, no more lies and secretes.” I looked up at him in confusion. 'Does he know? No, of coarse not.' “ Do-Ly noted” Was all I could attempt to say as I looked back down at the paper, not yet ready to write it down.. “ What else?” I asked, not looking up, as I wrote down my new rules. “ Thats all.” I looked up at Charlie again, shock written all over my face. “ Sweet-heart, I'm not out to ruin your life, I just want you to be able to come to me with the truth from now on.” He smiled at me and held out his hand for me you shake it. I looked down at it stupidly for a second, wondering what I was supposed to do with it. “ Deal?” Charlie urged, offering his hand once again. I looked at him and at his hand, still wondering what to do with what he was offering me. Finally it hit me, and in return, Charlie was hit with a flying hug. “ Deal!” I was so over joyed that we had come to an understanding, and it didn't involve too many tears. I got up off Charlie and stared blankly at him. “ What?” “ Does that mean you'll lay off Edward too?” I asked, hope saturating my whisper. Charlie smiled. “ I'm not out to ruin your life.” He repeated in a different tone. “ Thank you Dad! Oh, I love you so much!” I hugged him again. ~ ~ ~ ~ End ~ ~ ~ ~ I rolled back over and looked at the clock again. 6:32 A.M. “ Oh crap!” I shot out of bed and ran into the bathroom, slamming the door behind me in my rush to the shower. I was in and out of the shower in 10 minutes flat. I wrapped a towel around my body and walked to my bedroom to find clothes to wear. Upon entering my bedroom I found an outfit folded neatly on my bed . It was the one Alice had bought me a few weeks ago; a light cashmere sweater, a pair of dark low cut demin jeans and a pair of brown suade boots with a matching belt. It was a beautiful ensemble and I had always felt that I didn't deserve it. But here it was, laying out for me in all its glory and magnificence. I held tightly to my towel and briefly scanned the room. “ Edward? ” ( Theres more to the chapter, but I didnt want to put it all out at once. I hope you like it, C.C. is welcome, but dont be hurtful ) Wow, another great chapter. I really like you're writing style. It's nearly identical to Stephenie's style with just slight variations. I especially liked how the arguement/negotiation went with Charlie. I felt that, that was how it would go if Stephenie had written it herself. I can't wait to read more soon. loslover is right on the mark!! that is what i was TRYING to say in my previous comment...
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 6:23 pm
wow. conami is the only one posting stories. wont someone help her? i would, but i have no confidence that i would be able to capture Meyer's "escence" sweatdrop ...I confuse myself. did any one understand that last part?
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 2:33 pm
surprisingly yes, i like the word essance..its such a beautiful word, oh by the way
HAPPY EASTER!
I hope everyones easter was a great one.
I will be writing the next chapter within the next three days and will post it after i revise it and everything, please be patient with me. I am so hyped up right now on sugar its ridiculous and I doubt I'll crash anytime soon today or tomorrow. So you can imagine that my own patience and train of thought has detriorated over the past few days due to sugar highs and no brain activity. But I will try to get back track.
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