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Clearly not everyone liked it as your average rating is below 4 and leaning towards 2.
I could not say it without it being awkward. The words don't follow one another and you used why to many times.
When i said it in my head it was more like nails on a chalk board then a petal floating down a stream.
Things need to roll off the tongue and fit. I love the topic and idea of it but you need to express it with stronger words and more feeling.
And when you allow comments you are asking for constructive critisism and some people are simple and just say nice and their rating but others form an opinion like me. Im a crtiuqe and I know it and if you can't take me then you can't be a writer because I've been told I go way to easy on most people otherwise I would consider being a crituqe for real. I'm a softy and hon not everyone is going to like every poem. Some people are going to say your poem is s**t and some will say its beautiful. You just have to take it.
I appreciate you commenting me about it though. Im more then happy to give people my opinion. ^.^
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