You're right. It would seem very cheap for the readers, especially since it has been so long for quite a few of them.
So you think I should leave the 12( cool hr gap there and just go into detail as time progresses? Maybe Flip-flop it back and forth between the two sides during the story, until it is confrontation time, and then throw them all together where they are supposed to be/meet up.
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4hrs in: First time waking up since he was kidnapped. Learning about what happened to him. starts his first escape attempt.
Insert what happened with the outside help during the 4hrs the victim was originally asleep.
6hrs in: First escape attempt thwarted. Increased guard, a warning to behave. Other internal, personal thoughts about what has been happening.
Another look at the outside and how they go about their plan for saving him.
8hrs in: another visit from bad guy to taunt, tease and mock him. Probably find more about other plot lines. Find out exactly what is going on and perhaps more about his situation. (How long it has been and etc)
Plan finally starting to come together. Last minute finishing touches and other such things.
Or do you think it would be easier to keep all his escape attempts in one chapter, and all the outside helps actions in another, and keep it more...streamlined? "And then he..." "Maybe he could..." "Situation found him..." Or would that be too close to the summary escape idea?
The bad guy honestly doesn't see the victim as an extreme threat. More of an... Means to an End.
"As long as you are here than he will come and once I am finished with him, you are going too. So be a good boy and behave."
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