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 Posted: Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:13 pm
okay you guys dont know me but im Rose or little J but i have made some poems over the past few days and i want you to read and tell me what you think. Please
dreaming
awake
being heild hostage in your own world
is it real?
my heart screams
my heart bleeds
my needs someone to rucuse me from the world
stabing my heart
shooting my disteny
trying to shield myself
cant
shadows come arund me
more screaming, shooting and blood
my nightmare is coming ture
hurting inside
trying not to show
my arms bleed
trying to wash it away
my crys come out
but i try to hide with a smile
darkness over comes me
it my time to give up the fight and die happy
Please tell me what you think guys
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Posted: Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:21 pm
i think its very cool sad but cool but you misspelled recuse. sweatdrop
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Wistful Conversationalist
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Posted: Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:28 pm
thanks i know thanks for telling me and thanks for telling me what you think
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Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 8:10 pm
very good. a couple of misspells, but it's very good.
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