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Posted: Fri Aug 14, 2009 12:33 am
i hav'ent worked on chapter three at all, but i have an excerpt
The Pewter Pinnacle, it is the gathering place for all spiritual leaders that Galoma has appointed. The day was cloudy and the sun wasn’t visible. As the six monks entered the temple, the Grand Entities took their positions in front of the assembly. A white wolf moved on to a black pedestal, a white eagle flew on to a purple pedestal, and a white dragon glided onto gray pedestal. The six monks took their place in equal spaces between each other as they looked toward the three white beasts. “My past lives say that it has been many years since we have gathered” said the monk of the Deaoki Tundra “True, so do mine, please inform us great beings why we have been called to this spiritual place. Is it to discuss matters of importance? Or to bring our minds up to date on issues?” said the monk from the Gale Plains. “We come with a message from Galoma herself. This information concerns all of you, as does it the people’s guardians. Please summons the spirits and be the vessels for them.” Said the white eagle The monks all pulled up their left sleeves and grabbed their left wrists; their wrists having been tattooed with their assigned spirit’s symbols. Each one glowed a light blue light and then their people’s guardians came into form. The Hibe’ monk was surrounded by ash and smoke and Ignorcious the Red appeared. Then the Deaoki monk became engulfed by an icy mist and Azelum the Blue arrived. The Tretatian monk disappeared and then a stone statue arose and a dragon came out of it by shaking off a clay layer; Ternyka The Brass had come. The Galen monk became surrounded by a gray cloud and then Ralame the Purple appeared. The two hermit monks then awoke their spirits. The day monk had burst with black light rays, Onigix the Black was summoned. Finally the night monk was surrounded by stars and Frokote the Polar was summoned. “My eyes have not laid eyes on this sight for a many dawns.” Said Onigix. “You’d think that we be called here a lot sooner because of Cronomas’ Rule” commented Ralame. “Galoma always has her reasons Ralame, reasons we don’t understand.” Replied Ignorcious. “Please give us your attention noble ones. And will someone please provide us with visual of the Beasaore’s guards?” mentioned the wolf The white eagle spread her left wing and a misty cloud appeared in front of it. Then two people became visible. It was the two guards of Beasaore. “Lument Iyisa, Necron Lumonen… please join our meeting.” Said the white wolf “Very well, what is the dilemma?” said Lument Iyisa “Not a dilemma, but a message from Galoma.” Said the white Dragon “ Why can’t Galoma come and tell her thoughts to us, it is like she is heavily bonded to anything” said Azelum “Because Cronomas keeps close eye on her while she stays in that trap he calls “fit”. She can only pass on the message, if she left, Cronomas would notice and he would unleash his wrath with no mercy, that’s why! Do you not pay attention Ralame? Can all you do is be foolish and play in the clouds?!” yelled Ternyka at Ralame “Ternyka, you are as old as the ground we stand on, you speak in either wisdom or anger, saying exactly what you wants to get across.” Commented the white wolf “Very well, please give us the message.” Said Ralame “The message is that Galoma has chosen a youth, of her personal favor, and two companions to go and try to restore dignity like in the days of yore.” Said the white dragon. The attendants all gasped and made small comments like “ Now?” and “Is the time right?” “How long has she thought about this?” “Now settle down, the youths name is Winko G Iorik, his companions name’s are Menomica C Emon and Unombran Q Unola. Galoma says the youth is a thief and an orphan.” “Thief and an orphan? And on top of that, his first name means Common and his last name means Lost.” Said Ignorcious “I agree, he seems very unfavorable, why did Galoma chose him as her first Send out against Cronomas?” Said Onigix “We do not know, but like Ignorcious said, Galoma has her reasons, though we may not always understand them.” Said the white eagle. “Is that all we needed to hear, or is there more?” Asked Frokote “Yes, there is more. The boy and his friend do not know of their destined path, nor does Cronomas.” “That’s a relief.” said Ternyka “Do not spread word of this, the trio must learn experience without special treatment from others.” Said the white wolf. “There is no specific path he will take across Iosaka.” Said the white dragon “Is the boy combat situated? Does he have high intelligence of great skill with magic?” Asked Frokote “No, he is but a common thief like we mentioned, we see no potential either to be truthful.” said the white dragon “Cronomas rightfully gained his title the “steel-bone king”, I don’t have faith in the youth.” Said Azelum “If Galoma chose him, there must be something special about him we can’t see.” Said Ternyka “Perhaps you are right, I’ll put more thought into him.” Replied Azelum “ he better have enough potential to fill this whole temple and a strong willed mind if plans to have a chance against Cronomas.” Commented Ignorcious “Though my being is of negativity, I think the boy shall do well.” said Onigix “ I am to inform the boy alone about Galoma’s decision.” Said the white eagle “though I doubt that he’ll accept it on his first hearing of it. Monks, being just vessels right now, can you still hear us?” “Yes.” said an ominous echo “Are we to prepare for our encounters?” said the echo “No do not prepare, it maybe years before he completes his quest, you may not even meet him.” Said the white dragon “we understand” said the echo “Good, we are to help him and any companion he may have as he fulfills destiny.” Said the white eagle “ I just hope it doesn’t go to waste, being he doesn’t seem like the type to get the job done.” Said Ralame “Looks like we’ll just have to hope Ralame, for destiny is something that not even Galoma and control.” Said Ternyka “Seems that way, everyone, thanks you for attending, you are dismissed.” Said the white dragon. Then the white dragon, eagle, and wolf disappeared in a dispersing black fog. So did the mist under the eagle’s wing and the six dragon attendants. The monks then came back into form and looked at each other with nods and sighs as they left the pewter pinnacle with message in their minds.
this is 2 1/4 pages on M.Word, why doesn't look like that much? T-T
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2009 6:34 am
wow! dont you wanna save something for those who will buy the book?
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2009 6:36 am
HeroofAvarisix wow! dont you wanna save something for those who will buy the book? idk, i gunnaincorporate this in it somehow, huhuhuhu!!! this will be the begining of CHP 3
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2009 8:50 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2009 2:53 pm
maybe i should of just wrote gasp
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Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2009 3:13 pm
lol yeah, it wouldve made more sense
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Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2009 5:19 pm
then im going to change the title to this post
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Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2009 6:45 am
yeah, like to Ch.3 pt.1 or something like that
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Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2009 9:26 am
HeroofAvarisix yeah, like to Ch.3 pt.1 or something like that done and done
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Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2009 12:07 pm
whats with the "only" part in the title? (just curious)
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Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2009 5:11 pm
HeroofAvarisix whats with the "only" part in the title? (just curious) cause this is all of chp 3
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 10:17 am
seems like a short chapter
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 6:07 pm
HeroofAvarisix seems like a short chapter what, you never scene a short chapter, it probably puts more on book pages n real life
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 8:48 pm
actually, i have a few short chapters too. like chapter 1 for instance
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Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2009 5:56 am
HeroofAvarisix actually, i have a few short chapters too. like chapter 1 for instance see? threre you go!
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