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 Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 1:56 am
On top a bridge,
In the middle of the night,
Laying out,
The stars are bright,
Fish skip down the creak,
Playing their rhythmic beat,
Croaky frogs sing a tune,
This evening will end too soon,
Trees sway gently,
Dancing with a breeze,
Your sweet laughter,
Puts my mind at ease,
A birth place of myth,
Testing time,
Thoughts of you,
Forever, fill my mind,
Suspended in air,
Without a care,
My hand swimming gently,
Through your hair,
Unconscious minds,
Of unconscious times,
Mutual feelings of sublime.
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Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 6:35 am
While poetry is not my expertise, I like that. Nice change at the end from four lines to three, the subtle change in the rhythm was not too abrupt and gives a nice closure to the work.
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