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 Posted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 10:39 am
I've only read a few paragraphs yet (I may read more later, but I don't have time at the moment) but you seem to be doing fairly okay.
I'd advise you to not rush things. Explain how you did the actions you write about, and why. Try and write about your feelings. Apart from those comments, I'd say just try to be different. I've read loads of stories and comics where people write only about demons and their fighting and so on, they sound really cool while your writing them, but if you put nothing special or different in them, it automatically becomes boring.
I wouldn't really say take my comments into too much consideration - I don't write that much, but it's only a few things that came into my mind. I hope that helps you a little. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 3:17 pm
thanks that's only ch.1!
i was going to write about his whole life...so feelings and such will be in there very detailed (it's from his pov)
and i rushed it because it's only ch.1... only ment to grab the reader's attention into reading it so i jumped right into the action! thanks for the c&c i'll think about it.
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~Angelina Elven~ Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 08, 2006 5:06 am
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Posted: Mon Jan 09, 2006 6:45 pm
yeah, it's a story, it's SUPPOSED to be long.
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~Angelina Elven~ Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 2:24 pm
ApoxKun yeah, it's a story, it's SUPPOSED to be long. Oh....
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Posted: Sat Jan 28, 2006 9:04 pm
Gah, too much writing for my taste razz
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~Angelina Elven~ Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 03, 2006 1:09 pm
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