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 Posted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 12:30 am
Kazuo Ashura I have once again updated the application. Inspiration hit and I was forced to concede to its grace. So, if you all don't mind, I would like you all to take a look at the new application. Thank you. Also, if anyone has any great ideas regarding the application, or the guild in general, I would be more than happy to incorporate them into my plans.
-Takes a look- Ah... okay. -Updates her still-incomplete app.-
The Education bit confuses me though.. O_O; -Dim.-
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Posted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 12:38 am
[Tsumi-to-Batsu.] -Takes a look- Ah... okay. -Updates her still-incomplete app.-
The Education bit confuses me though.. O_O; -Dim.-
What part to be exact?
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Posted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 1:13 am
Nothing ... but I think I understand now. xD; Thanks.
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Posted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 4:25 am
HAILATER! cool
Well no, not really, since our computers motherbaord has died on us T^T
Yup, so we'll be RPing less, but we're not giving up. Hell, we've gotta resort to our computer. But since it only cost us $20 and runs on Win 98 it's kinda bad to do anything major on. Added in that we can't spellcehck as well with it and all.
Ahh well, yah better cope, since this is hard for us 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 6:17 am
Posted. It's way too long. xD;
T__T Aargh. Hope to see you soon, Ater~
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 11:33 am
Hey! I'm back!
*rubs hands together* App. updating time! wahmbulance
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 12:53 pm
Alright! I've posted my updated application in the new application page in the Database section. Please check it over to see if I did everything right. I'd be happy to correct any mistakes. 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 1:20 pm
Shadkim Alright! I've posted my updated application in the new application page in the Database section. Please check it over to see if I did everything right. I'd be happy to correct any mistakes. 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 1:39 pm
Alright, I've updated Ehren's profile according to your application layout, though I've added a little of my own flair to it. Give me a shout if you dislike something, and hopefully we can discuss it.
Before I post it, why don't you review it? The exact post
(Kinda long, ain't it?)
If everything checks out, I'll add Crest's profile to the page along with Ehren's.
And I'm thinking of fading one of them into the background while I start bringing up a new character (who I'm hoping to get into the Turks, though won't be starting there). I'm not exactly getting rid of my others, I just want to explore a different character.
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 1:50 pm
Souyu no Phoenix Alright, I've updated Ehren's profile according to your application layout, though I've added a little of my own flair to it. Give me a shout if you dislike something, and hopefully we can discuss it.
Before I post it, why don't you review it? The exact post
Everything is awesome, except for a few minor layout flaws. Mind if I quickly fix'em? I'm sorry, I'm picky that way. sweatdrop
EDIT: By minor flaws I mean a couple colons missing here and there, a few words not capitalized where they should, dumb stuff like that. It's just that I'm a fruity person who likes perfection, hopefully that doesn't irritate you... much. =P
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 2:29 pm
I think I fixed everything you mentioned. I'm going to go ahead and post both Crest's and Ehren's profiles in the new applications thread, and if you see anything else like that, then go ahead and fix it (I'm assuming you mean the Education/Training/Association/Occupation/Specialty area).
If you change anything outside of those, could you let me know?
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 3:14 pm
Souyu no Phoenix I think I fixed everything you mentioned. I'm going to go ahead and post both Crest's and Ehren's profiles in the new applications thread, and if you see anything else like that, then go ahead and fix it (I'm assuming you mean the Education/Training/Association/Occupation/Specialty area).
If you change anything outside of those, could you let me know?
1) The password should still be written out with asterisks, despite there actually being a password (the passwords I wrote down are for RPing purposes basically).
2) The proper terms for left- and right-handed would be sinistral and dextral, respectively, so I changed those errors.
3) You missed a few capitalizations and colons in both of your application's TRAINING sections. I added them.
EDIT: 4) This one is for everyone! I changed the WPN>>HND-HND to WPN>>MLEE, so I can stay with the "nine character limit" which most of the application is based on.
Oh, and awesome applications. The fact that you put much time and effort in them is noticeable.
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 2:53 pm
Lemme submit my new application for review before I actually post it. Anybody who wants to can comment on it.
Just to let you know, what I had in mind was a sort of "Zatoichi with guns" kind of character. If you don't know who Zatoichi is, check wikipedia.
Don't worry, she isn't Daredevil by any stretch of the imagination. The titanium rod that's listed as her melee weapon is actually a walking stick that she relies on rather heavily.
&COMMAND&__personnel report<
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!CLASSIFIED!
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PASSWORD: ***
&COMMAND&__"MP" --> Samael, Sophia]
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[BEGIN CODE --- 9718703]
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[STATS]
IMAGE: UNAVAILABLE
LST, FRST: Samael, Sophia ("Sophie") ...
AGE: 21 ...
SEX: Female ...
DTEOFBRTH: April 3 ...
BIRTHPLCE: Unknown ...
[DESCRIPTION]
HEIGHT: 5'2" ...
WEIGHT: 98 lbs ...
BUILD: Light ...
EYE COLR: Violet ...
HAIR COLR: Black ...
COMPLXION: Pale ...
DEXTERITY: Ambidextrous ...
[BACKGROUND]
WPN>>RNGD: Military Police Issue HK MP-5N Submachine Gun ...
WPN>>RNGD: Military Police Issue KG-9 Assault Pistol ...
WPN>>RNGD: Korth Combat Revolver, .357 magnum ...
WPN>>RNGD: Korth Combat Revolver, .357 magnum ...
WPN>>MLEE: Titanium Light Rod ...
EDUCATION: [Primary]: Hoder Zatich School for the Blind; [Secondary]: Costa del Sol Secondary School for the Impaired; [Degree]: BS Engineering, Highwind Academy ...
TRAINING: [Combat]: Shaolinquan; [Target]: Revolver, Pistol (Semi-Automatic), Pistol (Automatic), Pistol (Assault), Rifle (Semi-Automatic), Rifle (Assault), Submachine Gun; [Battlefield]: Infantry Assault Tactics, Infantry Defence Tactics ...
ASCIATION: ShinRa Inc. ...
OCUPATION: Military Police, Special Marine Corps ...
SPECIALTY: [Ranged Weapons Expert]: Handguns; [Engineer]: Aerospace Engineering; [Melee Combat Proficient]: Southern School Shaolinquan ...
APPEARANCE: ... Her frame is slight, though lithely muscular, and well suited to her martial discipline. Short, black layered hair frames her face, and her eyes are an intense indigo hue. A pale complexion, small bust, and narrow hips and waist define her body. When out of uniform, she can be most often found wearing a modest tank top and dark sturdy jeans, work boots, and fingerless brown leather gloves.
PERSONALITY: ... Calm under stress, and ruthless in her mentality. Having been blind her entire life, she has developed the frame of mind that she wants to rely on nothing but herself, and has a brashly independent streak because of it. She has little compunctions about doing what she believes to be necessary, and has a very pragmatic view of the universe, believing in neither good nor evil, only action and consequence.
EARLY HISTORY: ... Sophia Samael, Subject #64202 ... some information classified, level eight. Details involving her birthplace and very early life are obscure. She lived most of her life in Costa del Sol, attending schools for the blind and impaired during her time there, while simultaneously learning martial arts from the famed Zangan, to help her learn to utilize what tools she had to overcome her disability. Extremely tenacious, she graduated her place of secondary instruction at the age of sixteen, and went on to Rocket Town, where, at the Highwind Academy, she studied aerospace engineering, graduating with a BS at the age of 19.
COMPANY HISTORY: ... Sophia Samael, Subject #64202 ... some information classified, level eight. Despite her disability, her skill with firearms, particularly handguns and rifles, allowed her to enter ShinRa's ranks of Military Police after graduation. She has never related her reasons for enlisting. She rose haltingly, being transferred frequently from division to division, until finally landing in the Special Marine Corps at the lowest rank possible. Her condition prevents her from being an effective commander. Her specialized skills have made her a candidate for ShinRa's Elite Units--SOLDIER and the Turks--but her disability has kept her profile from being carefully reviewed by the Department Head.
WAR HISTORY: ... Sophia Samael, Subject #64202 ... Not Applicable.
...
--END Subject Bio--
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 3:04 pm
Kazuo Ashura Shadkim Alright! I've posted my updated application in the new application page in the Database section. Please check it over to see if I did everything right. I'd be happy to correct any mistakes. 3nodding I figured that it wasn't needed, but I thought it would look cooler that way XD. I'll change it though, if it looks a little weird. It DID look weird to have the paragraphs bolded so I didn't do that. ^^;
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 11:44 pm
I'm sorry for not being online much.
It's not that I'm lazy to go online or I'm too lazy to rp and stuff like that.
Its because I did quite badly for my previous exam.
Why? Because instead of spending most of my time studying, I've been too busy roleplaying [And other things concerning Gaia, like quests, guilds and stuff].
So I'm taking a break from Gaia and I'll be back around October/November.
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