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 Posted: Thu Nov 17, 2005 9:16 am
id make a lot more sence if Alice knew those to people and she felt they were in danger maybe you should try that.
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Posted: Sat Nov 19, 2005 6:59 pm
hey dosen't anyone have anything to add to this story?
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Posted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 2:51 pm
Hayden: where do you think they are?
Alice: at the mall.
Hayden: lets get them now then.
Hayden and Alice head to the mall.
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Posted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 3:00 pm
why did everyone stop. crying i really liked where this storie was going. cry
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Posted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 3:28 pm
moria 2 why did everyone stop. crying i really liked where this storie was going. cry it was from your last post. it dosen't make any scence still like i said change the lines between Hayden and Alice and it will make more secne okay that's what i was trying to tell you. Make the people that you mentioned in your last post that you made in page 4 they can be Alices friends not Hayden's that would make a lot more scence then the other way around and re-word the lines too like how they came into the picture. have Alice remember that they just showed up from another state or country. if you try that then the story will continue trust me. moon15 and i would like to keep it going too. and if you want i can help you with more of your portions of this story that your planning on doing in the near future if you want just PM me them and i can give you some feed back on them, okay. dose that sound fair to you?
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Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 9:19 pm
I think this story has been stuffed up way too much. We may as well start a new one.
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Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2005 11:04 am
JazZhands I think this story has been stuffed up way too much. We may as well start a new one. i agree.
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Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2005 11:09 am
Okay JazZhands you can start it off. if you can'rt think of an opening then i'll think of one if you have ahard time. oh and Moriatry and follw what the story line is about otherwise the story will go down hill like the last on did. okay. if you think a portion of the story that you wrote is good. fisrt send the potion of the story to me or JazZ and we'll give you some feed back on it that way we can have the story flow much better. okay.
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2005 2:53 pm
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2005 3:10 pm
well i'm sorry but the last story that we were all doing went down hill and JazZ and i know what were doing when it came down to wirting stories.
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Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2005 4:14 pm
waterbender09 well i'm sorry but the last story that we were all doing went down hill and JazZ and i know what were doing when it came down to wirting stories. Hey don't worry we can help you if you want. Its no trouble at all.
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Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2005 4:31 pm
i don't need help i already have seven storys already. so i don't need help.
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Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2005 8:18 pm
moria 2 i don't need help i already have seven storys already. so i don't need help. well we want this story to go well unlike the last one that we were all doing together. do you hear what were saying. we only want this story to work out perfectally. please try to understand what we are saying. please let us help out with your wirting. we're sorry okay, but we want this to be the best story here in the guild that way we can try and get everyone to join in the sotry with us okay do you understand that?
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Posted: Thu Dec 22, 2005 3:58 pm
yeah okey. but i've done really good stories. hey why don't we send our ideas for a storie line to eachother, to find out what kind of storie to work on. and can we have the girl who falls for hayden, named jennifer or ashley, i really like those names. oh and why don't we jazz it up and put like gundam wing characters in it, or someother show. just for fun. well thats all i can thing of right now, but tell me if you like it or not. please. biggrin
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Posted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 12:22 pm
moria 2 yeah okey. but i've done really good stories. hey why don't we send our ideas for a storie line to eachother, to find out what kind of storie to work on. and can we have the girl who falls for hayden, named jennifer or ashley, i really like those names. oh and why don't we jazz it up and put like gundam wing characters in it, or someother show. just for fun. well thats all i can thing of right now, but tell me if you like it or not. please. biggrin well JazZ and i were thinking about makeing a story after Van Helsing kinda story. Hayden being a decendent of Van Helsing and a half-vanpire that fall for eachother. we're thinking about it. what do you think about that?
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