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 Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 6:38 am
Rachlarn I like your repitition with the footprints in the snow line. And I like the feeling to your poem. I didn't feel like it was talking about the same thing throughout the poem. Like was said before, you didn't say anything about the lost spirit anymore which kinda kept me at a loss. I liked how it flowed. Like you said before: You don't like the poem very much but you like how it flowed. You were right biggrin This reminded me of a short story I once wrote... Thanks! <3
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Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 9:07 am
wow verry nice.. I love the wording of it and the reppitition... love it...
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Posted: Wed Nov 09, 2005 5:53 pm
The rhythm was very good. It's often hard to keep a rhythm exactly the same all the way through, but you did and I like that. Whatever it was exactly that you were writing about, I like it, as well. Since you never actually know for sure what is going on, it gives the reader freedom to interpret the poem the way they want and let their imagination play with it. Also, I liked the contradiction between the first stanza and the last. It really did make it seem as if the person finally found the reason why they weren't leaving footprints in the snow and healed it. A job well done! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Nov 17, 2005 5:06 am
Lycoris The rhythm was very good. It's often hard to keep a rhythm exactly the same all the way through, but you did and I like that. Whatever it was exactly that you were writing about, I like it, as well. Since you never actually know for sure what is going on, it gives the reader freedom to interpret the poem the way they want and let their imagination play with it. Also, I liked the contradiction between the first stanza and the last. It really did make it seem as if the person finally found the reason why they weren't leaving footprints in the snow and healed it. A job well done! biggrin biggrin Thanks you very much. ^_^
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Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 4:36 pm
Very nice. Nice use of repitition. I pictured a beautiful wintry scene. Nice poem.
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