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 Posted: Mon Oct 31, 2005 12:24 pm
Wow, Gypsy, that's really impactful. I pretty much don't have any critiques for this. When Little Red gave the "18 year old" her screen name and started falling in love with him, I figured she was at least somewhere between 16 and 18. The line that hit me most was probably "I'll look at least 14 in this." Great job.
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Posted: Tue Nov 08, 2005 7:40 pm
I'm glad that it shocked; that was really the full intention of the piece. I actually took a lot of inspiration from just casual observation here on Gaia over the past few years. Pretty scary what you see/hear(?) people say, and then see how old they are. We're in a society where we want children to look and think like little adults, but still behave as children; there's no middle ground for adolesence any more. It's my goal in life to write more stories like this and put out a publication of twisted fairy tales.
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The Bookwyrm Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Nov 09, 2005 1:16 am
I loved the idea, it was a very original concept with the brief you were given. I think I wrote a modern Cinderella a little while back, it's really fun, but too much head-work for me ^-^ Good luck with continuing the theme, it sounds awesome. smile
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Posted: Sun Nov 13, 2005 1:13 pm
Very good. At first Little Red sounded kinda like me but as it progressed I decided we were complete opposites (mostly because I would never think about dating an eighteen year old or wearing a padded bra) and I was happy about it when the end came. Itshocked me though. I re***y thought she'd get away.
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