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 Posted: Sun Aug 20, 2006 3:53 pm
Preview of the Prologue:: _____________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________ Quote: Tsunade nodded. "Great. Now, leave me. I have much work to do. As do the both of you. I want this party perfect." They nodded but did not bow- a sign that they would leave. "Is it right?" Naruto asked silently, "Right for us to do this to Sakura-chan?" The Hokage hated it when Naruto asked this. Yes, he had asked many times this question; getting cold feet. But she always reassured him with the same reply and reluctantly, he would agree. So, as always, she gave him the same answer. "Naruto, whether this is right or wrong, I'm also unsure. But Sakura needs this. Why? Because she needs to get her mind off of HIM. This is that chance. She would have a good time and maybe even meet someone new, someone else that's not HIM. Don't you think it's time Sakura becomes happy? She hasn't been since he left." Naruto thought about this for awhile. And, he agreed as he did those many other times before. Satisfied, he bowed, as well as Ino, and they left. Tsunade shook her head. Taking once again in her hand what she wrote with. She dipped ink and continued writing. A few minutes later, she massaged her hands, sore from all thr writing. "Finished, at last." She rolled the scroll and placed it on a container she then labeled, 'Sakura's Birthday Set-Up'. _____________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________ How was it? gonk Hate it? smile Like it? heart Love it?
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Posted: Mon Aug 21, 2006 12:04 am
That's the very beginning? Well done, then. You didn't give too much away, you didn't keep too much secret either. Well done. Give us the link when you have it at FF.net, 'kay?
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Posted: Mon Aug 21, 2006 8:23 am
Thanks.
Yup, I will. I'll let you all know as soon as I put it up on FF.
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Posted: Wed Aug 23, 2006 2:10 pm
The only thing is-- I'm having a hard time deciding if Tsunade should be good or bad. Not necessarily 'bad', but I mean, against the relationship of Sasuke and Sakura. I don't want her to be against, but if I don't, then the fic won't be as good. sad
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 5:36 am
Tweedledee Strom The only thing is-- I'm having a hard time deciding if Tsunade should be good or bad. Not necessarily 'bad', but I mean, against the relationship of Sasuke and Sakura. I don't want her to be against, but if I don't, then the fic won't be as good. sad
Plus, you could have a side-plot - have Tsunade start seeing Sasuke caring for Sakura honestly, and have her start changing her distrust for Sasuke into true trust.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 8:21 am
tenshinohana-chan Tweedledee Strom The only thing is-- I'm having a hard time deciding if Tsunade should be good or bad. Not necessarily 'bad', but I mean, against the relationship of Sasuke and Sakura. I don't want her to be against, but if I don't, then the fic won't be as good. sad
Plus, you could have a side-plot - have Tsunade start seeing Sasuke caring for Sakura honestly, and have her start changing her distrust for Sasuke into true trust.
But, like you said, Tsunade would warm up to Sasuke eventually.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 11:40 am
tenshinohana-chan Tweedledee Strom The only thing is-- I'm having a hard time deciding if Tsunade should be good or bad. Not necessarily 'bad', but I mean, against the relationship of Sasuke and Sakura. I don't want her to be against, but if I don't, then the fic won't be as good. sad
Plus, you could have a side-plot - have Tsunade start seeing Sasuke caring for Sakura honestly, and have her start changing her distrust for Sasuke into true trust.Well, let's put it this way (don't want to give away too much)-- I can't exactly do that because in the end, that trust would break again. Let's just say that Sasuke didn't exactly come back to Konoha with a happy face, er, that is, you'll understand soon enough.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 12:45 pm
Tweedledee Strom tenshinohana-chan Tweedledee Strom The only thing is-- I'm having a hard time deciding if Tsunade should be good or bad. Not necessarily 'bad', but I mean, against the relationship of Sasuke and Sakura. I don't want her to be against, but if I don't, then the fic won't be as good. sad
Plus, you could have a side-plot - have Tsunade start seeing Sasuke caring for Sakura honestly, and have her start changing her distrust for Sasuke into true trust.Well, let's put it this way (don't want to give away too much)-- I can't exactly do that because in the end, that trust would break again. Let's just say that Sasuke didn't exactly come back to Konoha with a happy face, er, that is, you'll understand soon enough.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 3:14 pm
I think I got it... sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 3:36 pm
I really like it! There were a few gramatical errors, but it's nothing that would make the story impossibly hard to read, so that's a definite plus. I've got a few questions, but they're typical for me. Stuff along the lines of: Is this going to have a sad ending, because if it does, I'm gonna cry! or Is everyone going to be in character? You've already got the second question down from what I can tell. My main problem with some Fanfics is that they make Sasuke way too soft, or his dialogue is just so awkward as far as Sasuke goes. I can tell that this won't be like that, though, so I can definitely look forward to your full chapter on FF. ^^
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 3:59 pm
ranningu I really like it! There were a few gramatical errors, but it's nothing that would make the story impossibly hard to read, so that's a definite plus. I've got a few questions, but they're typical for me. Stuff along the lines of: Is this going to have a sad ending, because if it does, I'm gonna cry! or Is everyone going to be in character? You've already got the second question down from what I can tell. My main problem with some Fanfics is that they make Sasuke way too soft, or his dialogue is just so awkward as far as Sasuke goes. I can tell that this won't be like that, though, so I can definitely look forward to your full chapter on FF. ^^ Oh, don't worry. I'm going to try my best to keep everyone in character. Especially Sasuke. I know he'll be stubborn but I'm going to try. But, I'm not gonna put lots of 'Hn's. Sasuke does talk, you know. Lol.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 4:00 pm
Tweedledee Strom ranningu I really like it! There were a few gramatical errors, but it's nothing that would make the story impossibly hard to read, so that's a definite plus. I've got a few questions, but they're typical for me. Stuff along the lines of: Is this going to have a sad ending, because if it does, I'm gonna cry! or Is everyone going to be in character? You've already got the second question down from what I can tell. My main problem with some Fanfics is that they make Sasuke way too soft, or his dialogue is just so awkward as far as Sasuke goes. I can tell that this won't be like that, though, so I can definitely look forward to your full chapter on FF. ^^ Oh, don't worry. I'm going to try my best to keep everyone in character. Especially Sasuke. I know he'll be stubborn but I'm going to try. But, I'm not gonna put lots of 'Hn's. Sasuke does talk, you know. Lol. But, thanks though.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 4:23 pm
Does he really ever say "hn." in the series? I feel kind of stupid whenever I think about that, because it sounds like it's one of the less subtle sasuke manerisms. xD But, yeah, thanks for the reassurance there! I still can't wait to read it! ^^
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 8:19 pm
Also, you have to understand that this is being made in a musical version. That is, there are going to be times when they are OOC.
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 8:59 pm
That's true. But how would they be OOC ina musical sense? Just curious... 3nodding
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