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 Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 5:29 am
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 5:46 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 1:19 pm
STIGMAta*
I wish to spread myself wide,
Overlapping your judgements;
A hope to coincide
with your juxtapose sentiments.
Overlapping your judgements,
I unfurl my blossoming petals--
With your juxtapose sentiments
catching snippets on my stem's nettles.
I unfurl my blossoming: petals
shimmer to life with a kiss of nubility
(Catching snippets on my stem's nettles
in the wake of virility).
Shimmer to life. With a kiss of nubility
[A hope] to coincide
in the wake of virility:
I wish to spread myself wide.
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This was my request-to-join poem. I never received a PM telling me my marks on it so I've been wondering how I did. neutral (By the by, for those who don't know forms of poetry it is a pantoum.)
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 3:35 pm
thanks a bunch! I didn't put in complex stuff because I had wrote it for a poetry slam which our grade was having, and most of the other students don't understand "big words" (aka more than 3 sylabols xp )
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 1:25 pm
I have a poem that I would like to have evaluated, It's called 'Not Enough'.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 8:59 am
May i please post a poem to be evaluated named "My Knight in Shining Armour"?
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 8:36 am
Any poetry may be posted for evaluation at any time, but it is normally not until the weekends that they get to be evaluated
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 9:09 am
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 9:02 am
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Posted: Mon Oct 10, 2005 7:32 am
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Posted: Sat Nov 12, 2005 1:01 pm
If I could choose the one to rate my poetry, could it be Nebelstern? I need his detailed observations and criticism as well as advice so that I may improve. 3nodding
If not, that's alright.
Could someone (preferably Nebelstern; no offense intended, and_solo_said, but you don't seem to have opiniated much,) rate the poem I had submitted to join this guild? Its a fairly recent one and I haven't showed it to anyone yet although it is short and comprehensible (if you have some pointers in classical litterature xd ), so I would like to receive some constructive criticism and improve it before I do. The poem doesn't exactly have a name, but if it does, it would have to be
"Dreams
Longing
Dreams"
Seperatedly, to have the intended effect. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Nov 13, 2005 5:23 am
I am afraid that Nebelstern has effectively left the guild, an I have always strived to keep my opinions from ratings.
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Posted: Wed Nov 16, 2005 5:47 pm
Oh, that's too bad, then. I won't force you into anything, so I guess everything's fine. ^^
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 6:00 pm
Sorry for not posting, exams.
Exams are over now though and i wouldn't mind helping to rate, perhaps two ratings will provide more readings and different criticisms?
Anyway, could you please rate my new poem: Rebirth of a Sun God?
^^
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Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 9:40 am
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