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Er...actually, it's this:

Dying: Help, I'm dying!

Dyeing: I'm dyeing my hair blue.

As for the story...it seemed somewhat typical, and I felt like I've read it before. I don't really see the point in throwing Dash in there, either. Everything else(sentence fluency, organization, voice, word choice, and writing conventions) is fine, though writing conventions could use a little work. You're a pretty good writer. 3nodding

that's really powerful, just.....wow! i can't help repeating what everyone else has said but that's pretty much all you can say to a story like that. it's great, i really like it (even though it's sad crying )

and there were some mistakes but i think everybody else pretty much said them all so yeah...i'm not going to add anything to that biggrin