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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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 Posted: Wed Sep 03, 2014 10:08 am
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Hello, my name is Youroka Kage, and I will be your judge today. First off, I would like to appologize for how long it's taken for someone to get back to you on this. I would also like to mention that I am working on this from top to bottom, as I am not the original judge. *Bows*
Ok, first things first, I noticed that your first judge did not mention that with pictures, we like to have about a 2 sentence description of either things that we can not see, things that are different, or things that you would like to add. This is nice in case the link you have used ever malfunctions, or we have someone that can not click links. I knew someone once that like to RP, but since he was in the military, he couldn't look at links outside of Gaia.
Shikai can not be Progressive. It is either Stand alone or constant. Though I will note, constant releases are rare, and normally not accepted unless there is a good RP reason for them to be so.
Ok, so Inkor causes wounds that cauterize because of the heat? I ask, because that sounds like what you want, but it's worded weirdly to my eyes.
On Ikari no ha (blade of wrath), what temperature does it rise to. It would also be nice to know how hot the blades are to begin with. Also, what happens when the steam is produced, can it be used to burn both parties?
Kasai no hana (flower of fire), the one that you stab into people, is an auto kill. Please wither fix it, or remove it. Also, in the one that you stab in the ground, does it do in a single line, or is it really in a 50 foot diameter circle or in a circular area of 1962.5 feet around you?(Yes, Kage does math) Also the way it's worded makes it an auto hit, because and I quote "The tendrils erect from the ground and wrap around anything within the twenty five foot that Aiden chooses." My suggestion to fix this would be to make the tendrils go out in the direction that you choose, it can not deviate from that path, and it wraps around the first, large thing they find. That way it has a way to miss, and it could also be used to change the way the battle field is. It also needs a cool down.
Dai hendō (cataclysm)- This one shoots 50 feet in front of it, and the direction can not be changed once it's fired? Also, it sounds like this is a charging ability, but I don't see a charging time. I also don't see a cool down.
Cataclysm's size is way too much. Since it fills an area, it makes to to 3379.8680871584 square foot area. That is too big. I understand that you take damage, but you never say how much damage you take. How much damage does Vast take?
Ok, to your new bankai!
Passive abilities are just that, they are to be used in the background. There are multiple attacks in this passive. Also, I like to mention with anyone that has a Stand-alone ability, that you will have no access to any of the shikai abilities that you have made.
Ok, since Daten-shi no tsubasa blade isn't made from soul steal, how long can it last against a Zanpakuto? I need to know more details on these waves, for example how big it is, how long these waves can go. Also the way that you word how it dissipates is a little off. You are saying that there is no way for the blade to dissipate unless you want it to?
For Tenshi-tachi no tsubasa, what is a strong attack? would Cero be able to take it down. Here is the definition for Cero
Quote: Ҫero (Arrancar version) Cero is a vortex of controlled Reiryoku and it is unparalleled at causing destruction of lives and property the users. It most typically is shot from their mouth, however a few Visoreds and Arrancar have been known to shoot it from their hands, fingertips, or eyes as well.The amount of damage and the size of the cero are typically determined by rank and Reiryoku level. The colour by the users Reshi. However even though they are very powerful they are slow. only movement actions are allowed during the post it is being fired, no other attacks, and you lose Hierro until two posts after the cero is fired due to the drain. All ceros have a cool down of 3 posts. Average Reiryoku This level of users cause less damage than there gillian brethren however it drains them of less energy (It can be used three times in a battle) The damage this attack causes what could be described as normal size stick of tnt worth of damage. High Reiryoku This level of users can use this ability 4 times in a battle. It causes what would be classed as four normal sized sticks of tnt Great Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 6 times in a battle. It clauses what would be seen in the human world as nine normal sized sticks of tnt worth of damage in a large area. Immense Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 7 times in a battle. It causes twelve normal sized sticks of tnt damage, In a confined space. This level the user focuses the blast onto the enemy more. Vast Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 9 times in a battle. This level of cero user has mastered the normal cero. It causes a whopping twenty normal sized sticks of tnt worth of damage in a very confined area. This is normal more than enough to deal with any threat.
I know it's a lot of changes, but I know you can do them. If you have any questions, I know you have me on Skype, or you can always quote me in here or message me privately. ✿Status✿ 
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Posted: Sat Sep 06, 2014 5:54 am
Youroka Kage ✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Hello, my name is Youroka Kage, and I will be your judge today. First off, I would like to appologize for how long it's taken for someone to get back to you on this. I would also like to mention that I am working on this from top to bottom, as I am not the original judge. *Bows*
Ok, first things first, I noticed that your first judge did not mention that with pictures, we like to have about a 2 sentence description of either things that we can not see, things that are different, or things that you would like to add. This is nice in case the link you have used ever malfunctions, or we have someone that can not click links. I knew someone once that like to RP, but since he was in the military, he couldn't look at links outside of Gaia.
Shikai can not be Progressive. It is either Stand alone or constant. Though I will note, constant releases are rare, and normally not accepted unless there is a good RP reason for them to be so.
Ok, so Inkor causes wounds that cauterize because of the heat? I ask, because that sounds like what you want, but it's worded weirdly to my eyes.
On Ikari no ha (blade of wrath), what temperature does it rise to. It would also be nice to know how hot the blades are to begin with. Also, what happens when the steam is produced, can it be used to burn both parties?
Kasai no hana (flower of fire), the one that you stab into people, is an auto kill. Please wither fix it, or remove it. Also, in the one that you stab in the ground, does it do in a single line, or is it really in a 50 foot diameter circle or in a circular area of 1962.5 feet around you?(Yes, Kage does math) Also the way it's worded makes it an auto hit, because and I quote "The tendrils erect from the ground and wrap around anything within the twenty five foot that Aiden chooses." My suggestion to fix this would be to make the tendrils go out in the direction that you choose, it can not deviate from that path, and it wraps around the first, large thing they find. That way it has a way to miss, and it could also be used to change the way the battle field is. It also needs a cool down.
Dai hendō (cataclysm)- This one shoots 50 feet in front of it, and the direction can not be changed once it's fired? Also, it sounds like this is a charging ability, but I don't see a charging time. I also don't see a cool down.
Cataclysm's size is way too much. Since it fills an area, it makes to to 3379.8680871584 square foot area. That is too big. I understand that you take damage, but you never say how much damage you take. How much damage does Vast take?
Ok, to your new bankai!
Passive abilities are just that, they are to be used in the background. There are multiple attacks in this passive. Also, I like to mention with anyone that has a Stand-alone ability, that you will have no access to any of the shikai abilities that you have made.
Ok, since Daten-shi no tsubasa blade isn't made from soul steal, how long can it last against a Zanpakuto? I need to know more details on these waves, for example how big it is, how long these waves can go. Also the way that you word how it dissipates is a little off. You are saying that there is no way for the blade to dissipate unless you want it to?
For Tenshi-tachi no tsubasa, what is a strong attack? would Cero be able to take it down. Here is the definition for Cero
Quote: Ҫero (Arrancar version) Cero is a vortex of controlled Reiryoku and it is unparalleled at causing destruction of lives and property the users. It most typically is shot from their mouth, however a few Visoreds and Arrancar have been known to shoot it from their hands, fingertips, or eyes as well.The amount of damage and the size of the cero are typically determined by rank and Reiryoku level. The colour by the users Reshi. However even though they are very powerful they are slow. only movement actions are allowed during the post it is being fired, no other attacks, and you lose Hierro until two posts after the cero is fired due to the drain. All ceros have a cool down of 3 posts. Average Reiryoku This level of users cause less damage than there gillian brethren however it drains them of less energy (It can be used three times in a battle) The damage this attack causes what could be described as normal size stick of tnt worth of damage. High Reiryoku This level of users can use this ability 4 times in a battle. It causes what would be classed as four normal sized sticks of tnt Great Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 6 times in a battle. It clauses what would be seen in the human world as nine normal sized sticks of tnt worth of damage in a large area. Immense Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 7 times in a battle. It causes twelve normal sized sticks of tnt damage, In a confined space. This level the user focuses the blast onto the enemy more. Vast Reiryoku This level of level users can use this ability 9 times in a battle. This level of cero user has mastered the normal cero. It causes a whopping twenty normal sized sticks of tnt worth of damage in a very confined area. This is normal more than enough to deal with any threat.
I know it's a lot of changes, but I know you can do them. If you have any questions, I know you have me on Skype, or you can always quote me in here or message me privately. ✿Status✿ fixed what has been needed but for dai hendo it says the charge and cool down Quote: The technique takes a post to charge and has a several post cool down with only being able to be used three times.
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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 10, 2014 11:48 pm
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Sorry for the delay, I took some extra hours at work. Broke Kage is Broke
Ok, I see that you fixed some of the appearances for me. Thank you, but we need to get just a few more fixed. I’ll list them this time, Mask Appearance, Your Zanpakuto Physical changes in both Shikai and Bankai.
Ok, thank you for putting in a tempature for me. Unfortunately, through research, I have noticed something. The temp is hot enough to the bone without much contact. I researched cremation temperatures and times. The standard temperature for cremation is in between 870 -980 degrees Celsius. Your temperature of 4500 celsius is approximately 5 times that temperature. As many, many poor cookies and other delicious baked goods have found out, increasing the temperature doesn’t make things cook faster. The normal cremation temperatures would be a better fit, unless you really want to make sure that there is never a long fight with you >.<
With a temp of 5000 degrees Celsius, that would instantly burn anyone in a 6 foot radius if you were able to stab someone with it, you would instantly cook most of their organs, effectively killing them. However, if the temp in the passive is lowered this may be ok, based on the temperature that you pick.
Kasai no hana (flower of fire), I would suggest removing the if stabbed in someone effect. I say that because of the fact that an explosion attached to someone would kill them. Even if it was on an arm or a leg, it would knock out several important arteries causing a fast bleed out. (fun fact, your Femoral artery gushes out blood just like your aorta)
For Dai hendō (cataclysm), I still need a size for the crescent blades, and sadly, I need an exact amount of posts for the cooldown, as Several to my understanding is 3-7 posts.
For ikari how long do the pillars stay up?
Do note anything that has to deal with your blade being stabbed into the ground wouldn’t really be possible with gauntlets.
In your passive how long do the embers last before they burn out?
With Daten-shi no tsubasa, it isn’t really fair for the blade made out of fire to be able to stay for an entire battle if you so choose so. I do understand that you have a cooldown of 5 posts if you ever dissipate it, but again, it is not made of permanent materials therefore it will need to have a time that it can be out.
In Tenshi-tachi no tsubasa, The Cero range would have to be from Espada 6 and up, as they have the same strength Cero as Espada 1-4 (The Cero Espada’s Cero is stronger)
I know it’s a lot to fix again, and I’m sorry. Again, if you have any questions you are free to PM me either on Gaia or Skype.
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Posted: Sat Sep 13, 2014 1:08 am
Youroka Kage ✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Sorry for the delay, I took some extra hours at work. Broke Kage is Broke
Ok, I see that you fixed some of the appearances for me. Thank you, but we need to get just a few more fixed. I’ll list them this time, Mask Appearance, Your Zanpakuto Physical changes in both Shikai and Bankai.
Ok, thank you for putting in a tempature for me. Unfortunately, through research, I have noticed something. The temp is hot enough to the bone without much contact. I researched cremation temperatures and times. The standard temperature for cremation is in between 870 -980 degrees Celsius. Your temperature of 4500 celsius is approximately 5 times that temperature. As many, many poor cookies and other delicious baked goods have found out, increasing the temperature doesn’t make things cook faster. The normal cremation temperatures would be a better fit, unless you really want to make sure that there is never a long fight with you >.<
With a temp of 5000 degrees Celsius, that would instantly burn anyone in a 6 foot radius if you were able to stab someone with it, you would instantly cook most of their organs, effectively killing them. However, if the temp in the passive is lowered this may be ok, based on the temperature that you pick.
Kasai no hana (flower of fire), I would suggest removing the if stabbed in someone effect. I say that because of the fact that an explosion attached to someone would kill them. Even if it was on an arm or a leg, it would knock out several important arteries causing a fast bleed out. (fun fact, your Femoral artery gushes out blood just like your aorta)
For Dai hendō (cataclysm), I still need a size for the crescent blades, and sadly, I need an exact amount of posts for the cooldown, as Several to my understanding is 3-7 posts.
For ikari how long do the pillars stay up?
Do note anything that has to deal with your blade being stabbed into the ground wouldn’t really be possible with gauntlets.
In your passive how long do the embers last before they burn out?
With Daten-shi no tsubasa, it isn’t really fair for the blade made out of fire to be able to stay for an entire battle if you so choose so. I do understand that you have a cooldown of 5 posts if you ever dissipate it, but again, it is not made of permanent materials therefore it will need to have a time that it can be out.
In Tenshi-tachi no tsubasa, The Cero range would have to be from Espada 6 and up, as they have the same strength Cero as Espada 1-4 (The Cero Espada’s Cero is stronger)
I know it’s a lot to fix again, and I’m sorry. Again, if you have any questions you are free to PM me either on Gaia or Skype.
✿Status✿ Done Kage anything else and check the passive for the descriptions of the appearance of the shikai and bankai
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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 13, 2014 10:31 am
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ The apprenences are in the wrong spot, however, I am not going to hold up this RPC with something like that ^.^ ✿Status✿ 
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Posted: Mon Jan 19, 2015 5:19 am
Updated for Captain Just added reshi level and new bankai attack
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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2015 4:23 pm
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Sorry for the delay, not having a really good week here. Anyhoo, there was only only issue I really saw with the new tech. Now I understand that you can only use it twice in battle, but how much of a cool down do you have in between those times? Also, sadly there is not a form of time in the guild, so I do not know how long half of a minute would be in posting time. I would suggest making it a post charging time so that your enemy has a chance to block/dodge.
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Posted: Mon May 11, 2015 2:51 pm
Youroka Kage ✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Sorry for the delay, not having a really good week here. Anyhoo, there was only only issue I really saw with the new tech. Now I understand that you can only use it twice in battle, but how much of a cool down do you have in between those times? Also, sadly there is not a form of time in the guild, so I do not know how long half of a minute would be in posting time. I would suggest making it a post charging time so that your enemy has a chance to block/dodge.
✿Status✿ Tis alright on the delay Finished the edits
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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat May 16, 2015 8:22 am
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ As long as we are in the understanding here that one minute equals one post, I will approve this. ✿Status✿
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