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 Posted: Mon Jul 20, 2009 12:09 pm
Well first you should check my poetry shop it has an example and Thanks but if you think my poetrys god tell me then I could help cause some times the poetry I write isn't the kind others want
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Posted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 10:07 am
OMG Im SOOO SORRY IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO REPLY BACK TO THIS!
Here this is one of my fav poems that i ever wrote I havent come up with a title for it though.
Brown hair blowing in the wind
Green eyes bright but sad
Looking at the plant growing across the street
It's so silent she can hear her heart beat with every passing second
One after another if pounds faster and faster, louder and louder
Her hands on the cold cement steps looking around
As she looks at ever color, every shade in her surroundings
She see's them so clearly but in the blink of an eye every color she saw had changed
....Yeah so that's one of mine whee so what do you think?
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 7:04 am
Heres mine stare
You prod poke shove tease taunt me yet I don’t care
I’ll let you have your fun for now just wait once some one else calls you a name
you’ll be shocked and let it over come you consume you until you crash you break down hate
and hate yet you know how it feels to be made fun of now you hope you can ask for forgiveness but it’s to late
I am long dead and gone you feel horrible you’ve led me so far
I jumped over the cliff of life
you hate yourself you never knew it would be so bad yet you think
you can forget months and years past
and you go insane your sent away to a crazy hut and more and more come to taunt you.
You want it to end it you move to the top of the building and jump out the window you ended
it or so you think you go to judgment and you don’t like the outcome you’re down
at the bottom you ask only one favor before you’re cremated and it’s to see
where I am I’m up in heaven having the time of my life
you thought if I could have one more
chance in my child hood
I would change what I have done
so now you’re burning and
fire burns you’re skin away
now you’re crying
you wake up as a child in math
you see me in the hall
I see you
I start to run and you start to chase you finale catch up and say sorry
now you have fixed you’re mistake your dead now
but nothing has changed so you live on at the bottom
yet your misarey is my enjoyment
you know and very well as I do that you deserve this
yet you want to say my name and hope I hear and help you up to me
but you made me feel like a nobody a loser,hated,
why should I help I don't I despite you more then my life
so I let you suffer now and forever days years months and yet you still call me
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Posted: Fri Jul 31, 2009 3:37 pm
@ play_ninja_krys { Its cool!! And wow, that was nice, I felt like I was actually in outer space and could see everything, I liked it!!
@ Alice { Yours made me sad, but thats a good thing, I felt like I kind of connected to it, you know? Its kinda intense to :3 I like how I could feel the emotions :]
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l Princess Sugar l Captain
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 8:30 am
Thankz I write a whole bunch It's in the arenas ^.^ search my user and give my votez
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 9:51 am
Really? Me too, though I wouldnt read mine cause their pretty....yeah, for people who are actually good at writing ^^" Some people who can really write tell me things like I have the right emotion, or I had a good concept, very few say im like, good, you know?
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l Princess Sugar l Captain
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 2:22 pm
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 10:49 am
Wow Anju! That was awsome!!! I love your poetry btw!!!
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Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 9:39 am
Thank you * sips Iced tea*
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2009 1:45 pm
^^ your welcome *eats ramen*
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