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Here is a short story I made up.
It all start like this. In a town of somewhere, there was this guy. Who like to draw portrait. He draw portrait of people for a living. Then one day, after he finish a portrait of a customer of his. He saw a lady, in her 20. She was Asian like him. She have long straight black hair. Blue eyes, she was smiling. she got on a red cherry dress and a blue pairs of high heel. She was looking around for someone. Then she saw him and came near him. She first glance on his look and proceed toward him. He was siting on a bench outside his shop. She asked him do he know where is the party house. He point ahead of him and say about a block. She laugh and left. He stand there, watching her walking away. He feel like, it was the girl he love walking away. He then close his shop and spend time on writing a novel about love story. He also, work as a waiter at a restaurant. In his spare time, he keep writing about one story. It took him about eight months to finish it and at that time he realize. The story will be much nicer if it have picture. So he spent time from working and drawing picture that his story told. It took him about two years to finish the art completely. His book than got publish, along with the picture he draw. It became a two book series. One is the novel and the other is the picture of each chapter. Then, after he publish the books. He went searching for that lady he saw at first. He keep checking in at the party house, until one day he found her. They have talks and she found out that he like her at first sight. That why he keep writing that story and turn it to a picture novel........
How will they end up? What do you think?

I agree with the grammar thing.