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Welcome to the one and only Gaian Instant Poetry Thread.
All you have to do is post some conditions - I'll explain that in just a bit - and I'll whip up an instant poem for you ASAP.
So. Conditions. Here are a couple examples of condition posts you might write:





A couple things you should know:
- I guarantee that the poem will be technically good - correct grammer and spelling, etc.
- I do not guarantee the poem will make sense. (There's only so much you can do with aliens, donkey, and medieval!)
- I don't guarantee any particular poem length.
- I won't accept swear words as conditions. Just my preference.
- I retain the copyright of any poems I post here.

Hope you enjoy 'em! smile

good job

Anyone else interested?

One of the things I believe about poetry is that any poem, no matter how good, can be improved somehow.
Kagomex, one thing you do really well in your poem is your use of word sounds. Another way I could say that is that when I read your poem aloud, it sounds nice - pretty. I don't understand what you're trying to say, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. The most beautiful poetry I've ever read makes no sense whatsoever.
But if you are trying to communicate an idea, here are a couple things you could try:

- Rewrite the poem, keeping in mind that the reader doesn't know what you're thinking - what you're writing about. This might not improve the poem, but it may give you some ideas.

- Give the poem a title that gives us (the readers) a hint of what you're writing about so that we know where to start digging. The poem is abstract enough that you could mean just about anything... focus our attention in one direction.

I hope that helps! smile

Okay! smile For those who don't know what the heck DistortedDark means by the "Endoplasmic Reticulum" - it's an organelle... a tiny network of tubes that can be found within any cell that has organelles.

4/2/05 10:32 PM - To the Endoplasmic Reticulum
Once I saw a hamster cage -
the biggest one in all the world!
A thousand hamsters being raised
in one gigantic plastic maze -
a thousand hamsters
running down the twisting tunnels,
trying to find some way out,
seeking for to hide within the closet
or beneath the bed.
And just when cats came in the room,
I woke - and found I'd dreamt of you.