Here's some proofreading feedback:
The very first sentence bothered me. I think it should be rewritten: Some of you may say, "No." Well, my response is that, yes, I very well can.
I think the phrase, "outweighs that of everyone else's" is grammatically incorrect; 'that of' shows possession, so the possessive "else's" should be changed to "else". Thus, the correct phrase would be, "outweighs that of everyone else."
"However, a minority of us is superior" sounded really awkward to me, but I'm not sure how to change it.
I was taught by my dad that you should not use a preposition at the end of a sentence; however, in my English 101 class I learned that the aforementioned rule was not officially adopted into the English language. But if we abide by that rule, the phrase, "just like being superior is" should not end with 'is,' as that word is a preposition.
That's all I'll leave for grammar. As for content, I would strongly advise that you create more of a flow between ideas. I know it's hard to do when you only have 150 words, but a smooth essay better captures a reader's attention. I think you should leave out that The Divine Comedy was one of your favorites, because your interests and favorites do not prove superiority. Also, people who have never read that book probably won't be convinced.
I also know that word, antidisestablishmentarianism. I read it out of a Babysitters Club book when I was 11. It's a long word, but I don't think it's the longest.
I'm not sure you'd be better than me or anyone else at anything, but we'll put that potential discussion aside for another time wink
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