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I have for you three stories which I'll post after this (each in their own post), so kindly don't take the poll yet. The are in order of creation, Knowing Sam, Squid, and Half an Hour. They are rather similar, I admit, but each written from a different perspect. The first, Knowing Sam is a monologue told to a therapist from a female narrator. Squid is told from the first person point of view of a male participant ten years after the events to his parole board. Half an Hour is told from a nonparticipant narrator, in the third person. It is also seemingly more lighthearted than the other two. I must thank my roommate, Andrew Tobia, as I have based this tory off a play he is planning to write. I hope you enjoy them, and I invite you to comment freely upon my works. Kindly don't use any of the following without my permission (which I must say isn't that hard to obtain, all things considered).

This is my first time submitting this kind of thing. Just in case you're interested.
Knowing Sam
Ben Gramkowski


I saw him on the news today; Sam Yaskovitch, 22 years old. Knowing Sam had certainly been one of the most influential experiences in my life, I’m not sure anyone will be able to leave a mark on me like he did. You see, Sam had been born a bit different, not too different mind you, but different enough to get himself tormented throughout his childhood. He was just a little too skinny, his ears stuck out a little too much, his nose was little too big, and he was far too smart. He was the archetypal bully victim, and the bullies of the Delmor school system were better at what they did than any in the state.

In third grade, we went to the Boston Symphony Orchestra for a field trip. They not only gagged the poor kid, but duct taped him to his chair. The teachers didn’t even notice until we got back that afternoon. His mother had to drive to Boston to get him. We all found it absolutely hilarious. I’m not going to lie, I joined right in the tormenting, I have no excuse, hating Sam was just the thing to do. And this was just third grade.

We tapered off a little after that, and when fifth grade started we all had another preoccupation, I told you what happened to Mr. Squidvinski’s class last week, right? Well anyways, what with all that we pretty much left Sam alone. Heck, he even almost had friends. Amazing what a common enemy can do, huh? Unfortunately after the Squid was gone, it started again. In full force Sam was tortured. The Squid, instead of showing the bullies how it felt, merely inspired the bullies to do more harm. It was around this time that I began to feel bad for him.

High School ushered in a new age for Sam. With all the new people around, the bullies of grammar school soon forgot about Sam. Sure they’d slam him into a wall of lockers from time to time, but that was only if they passed him in the hall. He was still in a bunch of my classes, most notably in my math class. As I said, he was a smart kid, so when my grades began to slip, okay, plummet. He seemed the obvious choice to ask for help. As the year wore on (and the tutoring sessions became longer) I guess we kind of became friends. It was weird. I don’t think he had ever even talked to a girl before, but he was always relaxed around me. In fact, he had a wonderful sense of humor about everything. He was not what I expected at all.

Our friendship grew over the next year, and even when I didn’t need math help anymore, we would hang out together. I still remember the day quite well. It was a Wednesday, the eighth of January, 1997, exactly six years ago today. He had me cornered, and I knew the question was inevitable. I didn’t say “no” because I didn’t like him. I really did. But I knew deep down that if I had said yes, I would have lost my best friend, we would have gone out for a little while, but it never would have worked out. We were in high school, that stuff never works out! I did not expect him to take it so hard, though. You’d think someone so smart would understand. The next day he was gone, ran away they said.

That was the last I heard of him until I saw him on the news this morning; Sam Yaskovitch, 22 years old, jumps to his death from the George Washington Bridge. If only I had said “yes.”
Squid
Ben Gramkowski


It was our first day of fifth grade, and we waited in the hallway for our teachers to arrive. This was a strange hallway, the stairs leading up to the junior high classrooms was right next to us, and already we could hear their lockers slamming. Fourth grade had been different; we had class in the trailers outside, and had to walk through nearly all of the building to get to the cafeteria, at least this year it was just around the bend. The other fifth grade teacher, Mrs. Goodrum arrived and let her students in. We who remained exchanged uneasy looks as we awaited our teacher. The older students had told us much about Mr. Squidvinski, enough to make a grown man cry. Yet their forewarnings were not nearly enough to prepare us for “The Squid.”

The bell rang and he still hadn’t shown up yet. After two minutes, the door opened beside us and the tallest man I have ever seen said to us “You’re all late.” His voice was strong, and dead serious. We walked into our new classroom as The Squid stood at the blackboard. He introduced us to the course, what we would be learning from him, he would be our English, and History teacher, Math and Science would be across the hall in Mrs. Goodrum’s room. As he spoke, I took not of his figure; he was simply the gangliest man alive. His fingers, which part of me still thinks were just bones, were an average of six inches long, including the thumbs. His arms looked about as tall as I was, though he didn’t look ape-like as did some of my long-armed class mates. This was due to his tremendous posture, he kept his head high and his back straight at all times, only ever leaning forward to tower over his pupils.

About two weeks in he threw the first chalk. Charlie Johnson was napping in the corner during a lesson on World War Two, the only topic he ever fully covered, when The Squid yelled “Think fast!” and threw the chalk at Charlie, it missed, shattering on the cubby wall behind him. Several students jumped, and it was certain that many parents had interesting dinner conversations that night. It just got worse, since it was raining that day, we had indoor recess, but instead of playing cards and drawing pictures like the other classes, we were given a special lecture on the origins of rocks. The loss of recess was a bitter blow to many of the students, but it was not yet strong enough to unite us.

In October it was really bad. With complete disregard to reality and the laws of physics, The Squid would assign homework, forget about it completely, and then ask for it a week later. He assigned us two papers at a time, for each class. There was one day we had three papers due, and two of them were on the same topic. You’d think that would make it easier, but you’d be wrong. If we had any thought repeat itself in another paper The Squid would accuse us of plagiarizing... from our own papers!

The resistance began with Sammy Lang, a skinny little kid with dark brown hair and a rather mousy look. Sammy was a master with machines, he would have become an engineer were it not for the Squid, and he developed a very simple yet absolutely ingenious projectile weapon. Stretching a rubber band between his forefinger and thumb, Sammy would fit a densely folded slip of paper over it and launch it with deadly accuracy at the Squid. He tormented him for the entire morning, until we lined up for lunch. Before he allowed us to leave the room, he demanded that we empty our pockets. A few students, having nothing to hide, agreed and went to lunch. A devoted few of us, though, stayed behind to protect Sammy. The more of us that stayed, we figured, the less likely he was to find the real culprit.

Sammy Lang, John Robinson, Charlie Johnson, Marisa Hunter, Eddie Bonnel, the Swedmack twins, Amy Codel, and I stayed. Unfortunately our plan did not work out. The Squid searched our pockets anyway. John, Charlie, Marisa, Amy, the twins and I were given detention. I still don’t know what happened to Sammy (I’ve heard rumors, but I shudder to agree with any of them), but I’ll never forget what he yelled to us as he was dragged off. “You don’t have to take this!” He told us, “You don’t have to give in!” We didn’t.

You keep telling me that what I did cannot be justified. “There is no justification, only forgiveness.” Well the reason I tell you this story today is because it can be justified. I don’t want forgiveness for what I did, if anything I want recognition. What the seven of us did needed to be done. Not for our good, for really how good is it for us to be stuck here? No. We did it for the good of our classmates, for the good of Sammy, for the good of everyone who would go through Delmor K-8’s fifth grade after us.

The day it happened it was raining out, like the day we lost recess. We had been preparing for just this sort of day for nearly a month. That’s how long it had been since we lost Sammy. When the lunch bell rang, Charlie Johnson was snoozing in his chair, and I was the first to the door. John, Marisa, Amy, and the twins purposely got in the back of line. The now-familiar yell of “Think Fast!” rang out in the class room.

“Run!” I yelled to the other students, as Charlie Johnson caught the chalk and whipped it back at the Squid. Several students wanted to see what was going on, but we managed to usher them out the door and lock it. The Squid was dumbstruck as we rushed towards him, grabbing whatever we could find at hand. We were on top of him in seconds, blinded by rage to the seriousness of what we were doing. We killed that man, yes, and we did it brutally. For that, I can never apologize, for he had long since killed us, and our savage beating was merciful compared to his methods.

I cannot lie, I would do it again. You know why? When, after they had broken the door down with the fire ax, the police were escorting us out of the building. I saw there, in the halls, everyone I had ever known. The rest of our class was there, Mrs. Goodrum’s class was there. The Junior High was on the stair case. And they were all cheering. Cheering for us, because we did what everyone in that school had wanted to do. When we were led through the younger wing towards the entrance of the school, we didn’t see horror and disgust (as we would with out parents) on those children’s faces. We saw admiration. And in that instant we knew that school would never bow before tyranny again. That day we became heroes. Even if I have to spend my entire life here, you cannot convince me that what I did to the Squid was wrong.
Half an Hour
Ben Gramkowski


“Mr. Yaskovitch’s suicide this morning is just one of nearly 100 that have been sweeping the metropolitan area over the last week.” The lady on channel 7 news said through the heavy glass window that made up the facade of “Stevie’s TVs.” Harold Kenneth Miller (of Miller, Mendel, and Sons Consulting), unfortunately, did not hear this. In fact, none of the 75 or so businessmen walking that particular block on the way back from lunch break heard it. This is mostly due to the thickness of Stevie’s glass, but various cellular conversations also contributed to blocking out channel 7 on that particular Wednesday. Harold, himself, had just hung up his cell phone and was trying to put it back in the “convenient” belt-hung holster that never quite fit his cell phone when he went down. Another suit, presumably occupied in a similar manner, had run right into Mr. Miller. After a brief moment spent gathering the few spilt papers and returning them to their correct briefcases, the two stood up and looked at each other.

“Harold Kenneth Miller?” The man, who Harold did not recognize, asked.
“Yes.”
“Of Miller, Mendel, and Sons Consulting?”
“That’s the one.”
“If you don’t kill yourself in half an hour, the world will end.”

The first thing Harold did was instinctively look at his watch to see how long a half hour would be. Once he determined from the shiny gold face that it was 11:57, the words the man had said finally managed to sink in. The man disappeared into the crowd quite some time before this realization, though. Harold was complete dumfounded for several moments afterwards as his feet took him automatically to the door of his office building. His internal reverie was interrupted by the friendly voice of Security Johnny asking if he was okay. Harold was brought back to his senses, and replied “Just fine Johnny, thanks.” Harold, much more lucid as he stepped into the elevator and punched in his floor, decided that his threatener was merely insane. He rationalized the man’s knowledge of his name and firm by telling himself he could have easily dropped one of his finely-embossed business cards in the confusion. He took out his card case and counted, “Aha” he exclaimed to know one in particular, as he was alone in the elevator, “There are only 13 in here!” Sure, he didn’t quite know how many there had been in there before lunch, but it still made him feel better.

The strange events of the day being fully rationalized, he sat down and actually managed to get cracking on the Bobson report like he told his secretary he was going to do all morning. In fact Harold was just about as productive as he had ever been, for about 15 minutes. At that point there was a file he needed to finish the report, and he could not find it anywhere on his desk. Realizing that he had brought it with him to look over at lunch (something he had not managed to do), Harold opened his briefcase to be met with probably the third most shocking thing he would see for the rest of his life.

There, where normally lay files and documents mixed with the odd package of Nutter Butters or a Snickers bar, was a picture of Harold himself, along with a long list of facts about him. For a brief moment, Harold couldn’t decide what was more frightening, this, or the sudden realization that he must have lost his own briefcase. Fortunately the next few pages answered his brief conundrum. This is definitely more frightening, his subconscious was kind enough to let him know as he looked over similar fact sheets for his wife, his children, his father, his mother, and even his mother-in-law. Granted, that last one actually lightened the mood, but nonetheless he was scared out of his mind.

The briefcase, though, did not stop there. After the information on every person he had ever cared about (and one he didn’t), were a series of schematics that, while he didn’t bother to read in their entirety, Harold could tell from the diagrams (and the large easy-to-read titles that told him so) that they were very accurate and well-thought-out plans to bring about the end of the earth. After those papers were removed, Harold saw the second most shocking thing he would see for the rest of his life: a watch. While the watch in itself was not shocking, the significantly-small and constantly-decreasing numbers, along with his own watch’s conformation that it was 12:27, was shocking.

Harold burst of the room like a rhinoceros that smells fire. If this unexpected action upset Ms. Munn, his secretary, his next move would drive it out of her mind. He crashed through the 26th-story window with even more gusto than he had the door. The most shocking thing Harold Kenneth Miller ever saw was the ground. He had never imagined something so incredibly massive could ever move so quickly.
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You know I actually read that posting guide months ago when I first considered doing this (but didn't have the stories finished yet) I didn't take into account that it would change.

Unfortunately, I didn't take into account that I had forgotten all of it either.
Wow, that was certainly a jack-assed way to put a simple request...

Nice work, MU.
I thought you might like that 'Trox. Especially the latest version of Squid.
Mankind Unmitigated
I thought you might like that 'Trox. Especially the latest version of Squid.

Wait, it's a new version? *Goes to read*

Freakin' amazing...
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I really like Squid. I haven't read the other two yet. The title of Squid just got my attention.

Some of you who liked his stories may like one I wrote here.
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I have some comments on "The Squid."

You don't do enough to villify the Squid.

Now that you've written the first paragraph, get rid of it.

Find something creepy about the squid and dedicate at least a whole paragraph to that creepiness. I forget what this technique is called, but in order for you to gloss over minor details, you should go into great detail about something very significant. Try thinking about Poe. I know it's a very goth think to do, but if you analyze his works, he usually focuses on a single emotion, (fear, jealousy, rage, that sort of thing).

I think you should elaborate on some of the buildup events.

Also, you have some grammar things (where "not" should be "note," etc) that need fixing.
yeah, homonyms are my worst enemy.
Thanks for the tip Ludo, always useful.
OFF TEH DEEP END
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I really like Squid. I haven't read the other two yet. The title of Squid just got my attention.

Some of you who liked his stories may like one I wrote here.
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Thanks mate.
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