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Ashi112 · 2006-04-06T12:01:25-07:00

[color=green]Well first I will start off by saying I haven't gone over it and corected any of the typos or errors yet. My spelling and gramer is really bad and you can yell at me for that all you want. I just want to know what you think of the story though. This is only the first two chapters and I will post more latter.[/color] [b]PLEASE DON"T JUDGE IT TILL YOU READ ALL I POSTED.[/b] Chapter one I want to leave this world. I want to go and live in my world of dreams. ...

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Good story line bad spelling and gramer.		66.3%	[ 55 ]
Bad storyline and spelling/gramer		33.7%	[ 28 ]
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Post: 12937029_3 created on Tue, 11 Apr 2006 20:29:53 +0000
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bookmarking this page, will comment on it tommorow, my eyes are too tired lol, anyway could you please add a line between the larger blocks of text? it may not seem right because of paragraphs but huge chunks are hard to read. 3nodding

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Post: 12937029_4 created on Tue, 11 Apr 2006 20:30:47 +0000
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You should read the posting guide and edit for online viewing.

The first couple sentences turned me completely away from the entire story... it seems like just another teen angst narrative.

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Post: 12937029_5 created on Tue, 11 Apr 2006 21:37:53 +0000
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You should read the posting guide and edit for online viewing.

The first couple sentences turned me completely away from the entire story... it seems like just another teen angst narrative.

Well I know it seems that way at first but the story completly changes away from that if you just read a bit more. The thing is it is saposed to sound like that at first to show how much she will change as a person, but it really is not going to be like that at all trust me.

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Post: 12937029_6 created on Tue, 11 Apr 2006 22:43:46 +0000
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Please leave the font the default grey, or change it to black. Other colors, especially the bright ones (like red, blue, and cyan) and the pale ones (like violet and yellow) are hard on the eyes and hard to read.

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Post: 12937029_7 created on Wed, 12 Apr 2006 18:39:16 +0000
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I'm back but you still haven't changed the format, there is no way I can read huge chunks of text like that! xp

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Post: 12937029_8 created on Fri, 14 Apr 2006 04:19:10 +0000
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I'm back but you still haven't changed the format, there is no way I can read huge chunks of text like that! xp

sorry I haven't gotten to that I will do it now and I will change the color sweatdrop

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